Watching them play

Heya Vampri! It might not be autumn yet, but here comes the crow, ready to leave a quick review on your work!
I didn't catch any grammatical errors, so I think that we can jump straight to the good stuff!

Raisa watched as the living children played outside from her bedroom window.

This seems like a great example of what the first sentence of a story should look like! I admit that when I first read it, I didn't quite catch that Raisa was watching living children and I immediately thought, Wait a minute? What? It looks like Raisa is probably not alive, which is very intriguing!

It was fun watching them from the safety of her room, where the haunted dolls kept watch of Raisa with their glass eyes, making sure that she was safe and sound.
Besides, her parents would take them soon, and they’d be together forever!

Well, this really set a slightly creepy vibe! Raisa, who stays in a room full of dolls and watches the living children happily playing outside... In the first half of the story, you get the feeling that Raisa actually wants to join the other children and play with them, but after this it's clear that she would much rather have them join her, haha.

This was a short but catchy story, in which you introduced us to a character that I would definitely read more about in the future!

Your local (friendly?) crow
- Kay

Hello, My Friend!

Hi Vamp!! Just Raven dropping in with a quick review. Hope you don't mind! ^^

Ah, what a nice little snippet to give us a glimpse back into the world of Jason and Jack! It sounds like Raisa is growing further into her parents' creepy lifestyle, with her own way of making friends...What a cute little cryptid-to-be!

As far as technicalities, I have no recommendations to make for this!

Favorite parts, hmmm...I do like this:

She never wanted to approach them herself. They would ask her to do too many things, and she simply couldn’t handle it.

I like how this shows us Raisa's position in the local community. Despite her curiosity about the children, it sounds like she has no interest in joining them (rather, all her interest is in them joining her lol).

I also like the emphasis on saying everything would be peachy at the end. In context, it comes off so delightfully creepy!

Overall, that was a cool bit of flash-fiction to tap back into the Creepypasta universe, and specifically Jason and Jack's portion of it! Nicely done!