Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for violence and mature content.
*This fanfic is underneath my folder titled “Creepypasta stuff”. Gacha Club character designs are under my forum “My character designs<33[2]”. Nina is a Creepypasta character created by Alegotic-twevel. Chris is canonically her little brother and Claudia is canonically her bully, but the relationship between Nina and Claudia is a little bit different in this fanfic. This is my AU of Nina’s backstory. Alyssa is my OC. Enjoy!*
Nina burst open the front door to her house and walked inside. Chris, as per usual, ran up to her with a drawing depicting some kind of dinosaur. She couldn’t tell with all of the crayon scribbles.
“Look, Nina! Isn’t it amazing?”
She sighed. Sure, it was alright enough, but really, did she have any time for it? No. She had loads of homework to do and Claudia’s words still hadn’t left her mind.
“Not right now.” Nina said in the nicest tone possible, which had Chris hang his head low and walk away from her.
At least he wasn’t crying. That would have made her feel bad and then, she’d have to spend hours comforting him all while trying to battle down any “rude” tone that may linger inside her, anything that would let out her discomfort in sparse ways that made it seem like she was angry with him and not deeply terrified of what had been told to her at school.
She trudged upstairs to her room. Nina didn’t want to be mean to him. If anyone didn’t deserve to get yelled at, it was him.
But Alyssa’s attitude earlier was strange and she couldn’t shake off the feeling that there was something more to her, something else that was far more sinister and that fear Nina had came out as being vicious towards others, like her younger brother, Chris.
Maybe homework would take her mind off that interaction. Maybe homework could take her mind off the fact that Alyssa might have sliced Claudia’s arm in third grade.
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These are the other chapters!:
Two cursed young girls: Part One (Nina Alexandria Hopkins) [Chapter One: Car Ride]
Two cursed young girls: Part One (Nina Alexandria Hopkins) [Chapter Two: New house, old friends]
Two cursed young girls: Part One (Nina Alexandria Hopkins) [Chapter Three: Dinner thoughts]
Two cursed young girls:Part One (Nina Alexandria Hopkins) [Chapter Four: Sleep?]
Two cursed young girls: Part One [Nina Alexandria Hopkins) [Chapter Five: School]
Two cursed young girls: Part One (Nina Alexandria Hopkins) [Chapter Six: Odd individuals]
Two cursed young girls: Part One (Nina Alexandria Hopkins) [Chapter Seven: Creatures creeping]
Chapter Eight: Losses and lurkings (Part One) [Nina Alexandria Hopkins]
Hello Again, My Friend!
Alright, let's take a look at this one!
Well...If I'm not mistaken, this is very similar to the last chapter, right? I'm guessing either an accidental double-post, or maybe just an updated version, given some differences here?
I will say, if it's the latter, I do like the additional details! Like this here...
I mean, that really helps the situation sink in—it wasn't just some drama or a typical fist-fight we're talking about, it was literally trying to bleed somebody to appease a demon. Wiiiiiild! O.O
Anyway, I guess that's all I have for this one! Nicely done!
"They who dream by day are cognizant of many things which escape those who dream only by night."
"Words have no power to impress the mind without the exquisite horror of their reality.”
"I would define, in brief, the poetry of words as the rhythmical creation of Beauty."
It gets stranger later, I promise.
Uhm this is kinda almost the same as the other chapter, is it not? I ran it through my word diff checker so I guess I will comment on the changes?
Hmm I appreciate the deeper insight into the sibling relationship and that it’s explicitly mentioned that she’s scared of what she learnt abt Alyssa. I really like the last line you added here. Really emphasizes things. That said, maybe consider removing the old version?
Perhaps I shall.
Yeah, it%u2019s a weird relationship Alyssa and Nina have. They%u2019re friends but not like super close.