*This fanfic is underneath my folder titled “Creepypasta stuff”. Gacha Club character designs are under this forum: https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?f=27&t=117842&start=15. Alyssa is my OC, but Laughing Jack is not. He is already a Creepypasta character. You may google him if you like. Enjoy!*
Sometimes Alyssa wished to break apart every living thing she came across. Sometimes Alyssa wanted Laughing Jack to sink his teeth into her flesh and eat her body, so that she would at least make someone happy.
But no, Alyssa was the “weird girl” who talked about Creepypasta and still liked to color in coloring books.
One day, Laughing Jack would make her his proxy. One day, she would find Kevin.
One day, Alyssa wouldn’t have to worry about the world.
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Oha that is a surprisingly dark thing to read (yes, yes usually your stories are creepy and well-deserving of the horror genre) but mannn a comment like this: “so that she would at least make someone happy.”
Aww poor girl ☹ Also very well done ofc from a writing standpoint!
Also what, what’s wrong with coloring in coloring books xd That’s a calming adult activity ofc!!!
I think as per usual this is very short but this fits here. It’s really just a buildup of frustration and sadness—makes one fear where this will go!
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Okay, this is interesting. It's incredibly short, but since you have links, I'm guessing this is only part of the story. From what I can tell, Alyssa is very troubled. I don't know who Kevin is, I'm guessing a lost relative of sorts. And this laughing Jack person, I don't know much about him but he seems to be some kind of jester of sorts. If she's so concerned with becoming his proxy, she's probably very lonely and in need of some form of help. She appears to be close to some form of breaking point, she wants some attention, and her death would be a willing price to pay for her to get it. All in all, I think this has the potential to give representation to people who are lonely and desperate for human contact. Many people would find this amusing, or silly, but people can really get pushed past their breaking point and I feel as though this story is a good way to show that.