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When Jason first visited Amelia

*This fanfic is underneath my folder titled “Creepypasta stuff”.  This event is something that actually happens in Jason’s origin story. Jason the toymaker was created by Krisantyl. I gave the bird a name in this story, there was no name originally.  Gacha Club character designs are under my forum titled “My character designs<33”. Enjoy!*

“Stay right there, Jason! Me and my Mommy are going to get the cookies!” Amelia said happily.

Jason watched as Amelia skipped off into the kitchen, to where her Mom waited. It must have been nice, to have a mother who cared.

Amelia brought him over to her house, to play with him! His parents, too busy with their own work, didn’t notice that he was gone, but that was alright. He’d come back before they suspected something anyway.

Jason turned to look at the yellow canary chirping away in the white cage. It was Amelia’s pet named Cady. Apparently, Cady was her best friend, more close to her than her other friends, Lucy and Johnathan.

Jason was the very last, the person who mattered the least to her. Yes, she was his friend, but how close was he to her? Did she see him as something fun to have around, and nothing more?

That useless canary. All it did was chirp away. What could it give her? What could it offer? It was just a pretty, fragile bird.

Jason found himself reaching into the bird’s cage, grasping his hand around Cady’s body. Cady began to scream, but he squeezed tighter, till her eyes went wide, and her beak stopped screeching.

The bird went limp in his hand and flew to the floor of the cage.

Jason drew back his hand, heart beating rapidly within.

It was wrong. Killing someone’s pet was wrong, and yet, he felt so happy doing it.

The bird was gone! One friend down, only two more to go!

“I think that Cady is dead!” Jason called out.

Amelia and her Mom rushed to the living room.

He watched as Amelia began to sob, and wrapped his arms around her, whispering sweet things to her. He cared about her oh so much.

Even though his heart lifted at the sight of the dead bird, he wasn’t a monster. He just really loved Amelia. He didn’t want to be alone.

Jason couldn’t stop the twitch of a smile on his lips. Her Mom saw it, but at least Amelia didn’t see it. Amelia was the important one. Amelia was his friend.

He was never a monster, right?

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yoshikrab
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Hey frenno, I'm back for another review!!

I just noticed that these stories seem to all be connected, cause I was looking at some of your other stuff, and there's parts where Jason meets Laughing Jack? (I reviewed a story with Laughing Jack the other day, so I still remember this character.) I'm afraid I don't have much of the context, but I'll try to review as best I can!

It must have been nice, to have a mother who cared.


Okay, I really like this quote. It immediately tells us a lot about Jason! He's not only in a situation with his mother figure. Either she's no longer with him, or the emphasis on "who cared" shows his mother is likely neglecting him or perhaps even abusing him. But anyways, I really like this line because it already starts to build intrigue about his character. Well done!

Jason was the very last, the person who mattered the least to her. Yes, she was his friend, but how close was he to her? Did she see him as something fun to have around, and nothing more?


Wow, so Jason actually might have an attachment complex. He needs to be loved and craves it, which definitely fits with what we've seen of his character so far. Also, these kinds of characters fit really well with horror themes!

The bird was gone! One friend down, only two more to go!


This is a pretty horrific realization, but I think it could be done a lot better. Obviously, it's very important that Jason wants to kill Amelia's other friends, but I think it's a lot stronger if the reader realizes this on their own, rather than having Jason tell it to them. For example, right after he kills Cady :(, he could focus on the bird's eyes and imagine her other friends' eyes in the same place. This way, the reader can slowly make the connection that he's NOT done.

Plot wise, everything is coming together. He's trying to kill everyone close to Amelia so that she will only love him. Pretty crazy stuff.

He cared about her oh so much.


I think this doesn't quite match the tone of the rest of your story, but I'm not sure how you could adjust it? Maybe just removing the "oh". Something like

He cared about her too much


This short little story was a very fun read! And there is definitely no question in the reader's mind that Jason is, in fact, a monster. At least, that was what I thought. Idk about everyone else...

I'll be back for more!

-yosh out

Would you like to me to link the fanfics that connect to this?

Glad you enjoyed!

sure! it would definitely help me figure out what to read next

oh goodness that is quite a bit T-T

Yes, you don%u2019t have to read it all at once. Whatever you have time for! ^v^

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Ravena
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Ravena wrote a review · Tue Jun 03, 2025 2:39 am

Hello Again, My Friend!

Hi Vamp! Just me dropping in with a quick review.

Ooo, a continuation of Jason's arc with Amelia! And here we see some darker manifestations from our cryptid-to-be...You really captured the spirit of Jason's original story here—his unhealthy friendship with Amelia, his desire to isolate her, and of course the murderous potential lurking within. All while giving more depth to his developing character, with his inner-thoughts in the moment!

As far as technical details go, I have nothing to recommend here! I really enjoyed this new installment to the story!

As for favorite lines and parts, I would say...

Jason was the very last, the person who mattered the least to her. Yes, she was his friend, but how close was he to her? Did she see him as something fun to have around, and nothing more?


I really like this subtle switch in tone. I thought it helped show that Jason didn't come with the sole intention of hurting anybody or anything, plus as far as tension building goes, you can just sense something is off here...

Even though his heart lifted at the sight of the dead bird, he wasn’t a monster. He just really loved Amelia. He didn’t want to be alone.

Jason couldn’t stop the twitch of a smile on his lips. Her Mom saw it, but at least Amelia didn’t see it. Amelia was the important one. Amelia was his friend.


I really loved the aftermath of this. Not only the motive he states, which I feel is both sweeter and at the same time crueler than so many classic creepypastas, but him not even caring that the Mom saw him smile just really showed the level of sociopathy going on here.

Overall, that was awesome! Nicely done! :D


Thus concludes my review. To leave off, here are some inspiring quotes, courtesy of your resident Poe freak ~

"They who dream by day are cognizant of many things which escape those who dream only by night."
"Words have no power to impress the mind without the exquisite horror of their reality.”
"I would define, in brief, the poetry of words as the rhythmical creation of Beauty."

I am so glad you enjoyed this! A lot more terrible things will happen in Jason%u2019s story%u2026

I am so glad you enjoyed this! A lot more terrible things will happen in Jason%u2019s story%u2026



A non-writing writer is a monster courting insanity.
— Franz Kafka