Published April 22, 2026 ·
*This fanfic is underneath my folder titled “Creepypasta stuff”. Gacha Club character designs are under this forum: https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?f=27&t=116005&start=1380. All of the characters used are from the Creepypasta fandom. Their names are Sam Williams, Sally Dawn, and Lazari Swann. You can google them if you wish. This is just my AU of them. Enjoy!*
Sam kept running, hoping that he’d eventually lose Lazari. But she seemed to make the hallways of his own house longer and darker, making them twist in shapes that had made no sense to him.
But his room was getting closer. It had to be. He couldn’t just be running aimlessly. He had to have some sort of finality, some-
He felt a hand grip his arm rather tightly and almost panicked, but relaxed when he saw that the arm was bloody and bruised.
It was only Sally who was pulling him away.
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This sentence confused me a little! Is sam making the hallways of Lazari’s house longer or is Sam? Maybe I’m tired but this wording just confused me a tad! I love the idea though and it’s a great description!
I love this. It’s funny because anyone else would be horrified to see a bloodied and bruised hand grabbing for them but for Sam it’s a relief! I just love this Creepypasta world you’ve written.
I’m glad you are intrigued by my Creepypasta AU.
Sam feels that way because he’s scared, the halls aren’t actually getting longer.
Ok idk why but this appears to be the next story in that folder even if it doesn’t have anything to do with Alyssa so…let’s read this next?
I feel like this really doesn’t work as a standalone. As in, not even if the stories were all in the same folder and easily accessible. This is a scene from a chapter that should have been published in the same document as anything that came before it. It feels very unfinished and I couldn’t really enjoy it for what it was because the context was missing. It might have been better if you put a small summary into the A/N?
Yes, I know you out links to the before stuff into the sticked comment, I’m just saying that it would be even better that instead of posting each of them separately as these … floating pieces, it would be better to wait until you could post a larger chapter with a cohesive idea?
That said I find this phrasing really well done to show this character’s mental state and the world he lives in: “ but relaxed when he saw that the arm was bloody and bruised.“ =D
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It’s in the same folder as the Alyssa story because it’s also a Creepypasta fanfic.
Thx for reading!