Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for violence.
*This fanfic song/poem is under my folder titled “Creepypasta stuff”. Gacha Club character designs are under my forum titled “My character designs<33[2]”. This is based off the Creepypasta character “Jeff the Killer”, created by GameFuelTV. Enjoy and Happy Halloween season!*
It’s never the good thing
It’s still not the right thing
But they’re not gonna listen unless you do it
That’s what you say, isn’t it?
Carve up their frail flesh and lick the blood off the knife
It’s so exciting to live your life
No friends, no family
Nowhere to call your own
Not really like you had much of a home
A smile makes them like you, but not even a grin got them to give in
Blistered, burned, bleached
Hardly alive
Not quite dead
You’ll slash apart their heads
Creep towards their beds
But being the monster won’t get rid of your dread
It’s so pretty to watch the blood fall like raindrops
Your heart hurts a little less
Oh, my mistake
You don’t have one
And if it is, it’s a dried up husk
Just like the scars on your face
The skin on your bones
The last, dying, barely there light of hope in your soul
You don’t care about anyone, yet you wonder why you’re so alone
You think being
“The evil one”
“The edgy one”
“The tragic, fucked-up hot one”
Will save you from your nightmares
But violence isn’t good
It’s not even righteous
And as long as you sentence people to sleep
You’ll never know a night of peace
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And another poem to round this out 😊
I especially like this sequence here
This one one the other hand I feel is a bit too weak for the rhyme: “You’ll slash apart their heads”
Oh and that part is sad: “You don’t care about anyone, yet you wonder why you’re so alone”
I find it very interesting that this poem implies that Jeff isn’t as happy as you present him in your other stories. Maybe this captures the vibe of a Jeff that isn’t happily married with a daughter?
Well, yes. You are right about the meaning of this poem. And Jeff loves his husband and daughter but there is always going to be this sadness he%u2019ll feel. He%u2019ll die before he shows any vulnerability though.
Thx for reading!
Hi! I noticed this come up, and thought I may as well drop a quick review. I really like seeing you try your hand at this creepy poetry, and it’s really good. You pretty much managed to nail all the twisted parts of Jeff’s personality, and I love the way you describe him, because it feels so accurate. He’s alive, human, but also not exactly. He’s definitely a drifter, and has little if any pattern to his killings, unlike other Creepypasta killers. The pattern of smiles and telling them to “go to sleep”, of course, a classic for any Jeff content. Finally, the end there, I thought was really cool, and how you show that being “different” or trying to get on his level won’t save you. I don’t know a Creepypasta where that does work, actually, but it’s definitely not with Jeff, haha.
I don’t know the intricacies of poetry too good in the first place, so I’m not sure what to recommend for improvement here. I had an itch to recommend taking out the F-bomb toward the end, just to make it a little more friendly to younger audiences, but then just as fast, I remember that if someone is reading creepypasta content, bad language is probably among the least things they’re phased by, haha. I did feel just a little confused by the tone of the ending, because “violence isn’t good or righteous”, while a sentiment I agree with, doesn’t sound like something Jeff would say to me. However, that’s the point of fanfiction, right? To show another, more original side of a character, so it works.
I’d give this a 10/10, in part because of my Jeff bias, and in part because it’s just a great poem for the season. Nice job, and Happy Halloween season.
Oooh it%u2019s not supposed to be Jeff speaking. This is directed towards Jeff. It sort of goes over my sympathy for him but also how he is so crazy that he probably doesn%u2019t even know how to help himself anymore.
But I am glad you enjoyed this!
Ohhh, that makes sense! Sorry I missed that. Cool!
Yw and that%u2019s alr!!