Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for violence.
*This fanfic is underneath my folder titled “Creepypasta stuff”. Gacha Club character designs are under this forum: https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?f=27&t=116005&start=1275. This is a fanfic of the Creepypasta character, Nina the Killer. Other Creepypastas mentioned are Jeff the Killer, Zalgo, Slenderman, and Zalgo. What is Creepypasta? Tis’ internet horror, which can be a spooky story, video, or photo. You can look up all the Creepypastas I mentioned if you are interested in learning more about them. My OCS are Zoe and Sienna. Anyway, enjoy!*
Nina stabbed her fork into her bowl of macaroni and cheese, Jeff’s encounter still lingering in her mind. She had finished her homework, the concerns of whether or not she got any of it correct unimportant to her.
Chris was watching the TV, absentmindedly eating. Some cartoon show was on, but at the moment, only commercials were playing. It did not matter to him. He liked watching anything that was on the TV, merely because it was a TV.
Mom and Dad were eating spaghetti, deciding that as adults, they didn’t “need” mac and cheese. There were a lot of things that they thought they needed and didn’t.
Nina wanted to leave behind her homework, school, the mundanity, all of it, and in its place, live amongst the Creepypastas and commit murders, but there was the trouble of finding who to kill and embarrassingly so, she did not know if she wanted to. It was one thing to read about it and to fantasize it, but to put it in practice? That was something else entirely.
Her whole family, living their boring, comfortable lives. If only Nina could tell them the truth of her thoughts, her plans.
But they’d never understand. She had to figure it out herself.
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She had finished taking a shower and was heading off to bed in her pink pajamas. She would go to sleep. She would clear her head.
Nina pulled the covers over herself and lay still, waiting for sleep to snatch her away, to whisk her off, to…to…
It was Saturday morning. Nina was still in bed, but she could hear the blur of the TV downstairs. It sounded like the news. Why was the news on? She wanted to watch something cooler.
Nina pulled back the covers and walked downstairs, getting ready to change the channel. On Saturdays, only fun things could be played. It was the right thing to do, it-
“Oh my god, oh my god! This is horrible.”
She stopped. Why was her Mom all upset? Why did she sound like she was going to choke? Her heart raced with unease as Nina got closer and closer…no…no…
There were two sides on the screen, showing two houses on fire. She didn’t need to read the headline to know whose houses they were, because she had visited them hundreds of times in her life, had played games in them, had watched movies in them, had hoped and dreamed in them…
“Nina, you’re up! I’m so sorry you have to see this, here, you can change it.”
Mom handed her the remote. Nina took it, still staring at the TV. But she didn’t change the channel.
Zoe and Sienna’s houses were on fire. The flames were choking up the houses, tearing through the dark night sky. It had happened last night. Nina was imagining that Jeff was her boyfriend keeping her company in the night, like always, and her friends were burning. They were BURNING. But how? How could that happen? What if somebody did something? It didn’t seem right to Nina that their houses would just BURN.
Or maybe she read too many Creepypastas. Maybe it was just a tragic accident. But yet, it didn’t seem right that there was no bigger cause of her friends’…death. What if-no-but it couldn’t be-but people reported seeing Slenderman and Jeff and Laughing Jack and all the others, so what if? What if it was…Zalgo?
Zalgo wasn’t like Slenderman. He was evil. He was corrupt. He hurt innocent people. He ruled over the Creepypastas. He would burn her friends down, if he were real.
But if he was, then the adults didn’t know and there was nothing that Nina could do to tell them, because they’d never believe her, because they’d never listen to reason, because-because-
Nina kicked off the covers, suddenly feeling way too hot in the blankets. She needed to cool down.
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@Ravena, when you have time, you can review this if you want!
Pls check these other fanfics out!:
Two cursed young girls: Part One (Nina Alexandria Hopkins) [Chapter One: Car Ride]
Two cursed young girls: Part One (Nina Alexandria Hopkins) [Chapter Two: New house, old friends]
Two cursed young girls: Part One (Nina Alexandria Hopkins) [Chapter Three: Dinner thoughts]
Two cursed young girls:Part One (Nina Alexandria Hopkins) [Chapter Four: Sleep?]
Two cursed young girls: Part One [Nina Alexandria Hopkins) [Chapter Five: School]
Two cursed young girls: Part One (Nina Alexandria Hopkins) [Chapter Six: Odd individuals]
Two cursed young girls: Part One (Nina Alexandria Hopkins) [Chapter Seven: Creatures creeping]
Chapter Eight: Losses and lurkings (Part One) [Nina Alexandria Hopkins]
Two cursed young girls: Part One [Chapter Nine] [Nina Alexandria Hopkins]
Two cursed young girls: Nina Alexandria Hopkins (part one) [Chapter Ten-Getting time to kill]
Nina’s dream
Nina’s torment
Nina gets an ipad
After learning of Jeff
The attempted summoning of Jeff the Killer
No boys are Jeff
The failed summoning of Jeff the Killer
A secret between us
Teratophilia Nina
Alyssa makes a post
The killing of the cat
You will never understand him like I do
And one more for good measure~

For a sec I confused this series with Emberlyn and Juniper but no, this is Nina! (Confusion on my part not any of your phrasings; I was a silly goose)
(You mention Zalgo twice in the A/N, is there a reason for that?)
This first paragraph feels very nice, with a short recap on what came before that doesn’t feel out of place or overstays its welcome!
I kinda am reminded of Coraline by the way Nina describes her boring life. I … just feel like Nina, having way more extreme wishes, probably won’t learn what Coraline does….
I like that this implies that Nina is not too far gone for some morality: “ Her heart raced with unease “
I also like this observation: “yet, it didn’t seem right that there was no bigger cause of her friends’…death.” That when something bad happens we immediately want there to be a good reason for it, or at least some reason. Tho I think she’s jumping the gun a little, so far only the house is burning right? (But then again this is a dream so dream logic applies)
Now I do want to know what happens next. If the dream was a vision and if eventually Nina will do something about Zalgo. Considering she too is a creepypasta, eventually (given that she will gain the moniker “Nina the Killer”) maybe she can replace Zalgo? *musings musings*
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