Published September 4, 2026
*These fanfic chapters are under my folder “Creepypasta stuff”. Gacha Club character designs are in this forum: https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic/117842-my-character-designs-lt-33-3?start=210. This is my version of LJ’s backstory. Enjoy!*
Chapter Four
I see a lot of pretty golden and white light. I can’t feel the ground underneath me. I’m floating.
“You and Isaac can come here if you listen.” The voices say all together. They all sound like they’re singing.
But listen to what? I just want to play. I just-
“Laughing Jack!”
Chapter Five
“I finished all my work, what game do you want to play?”
I’m not in that golden and white place anymore. I’m in Isaac’s dirty and toy-less room, looking at his bright green eyes and mud-stained blond hair. I don’t hear the voices, either. But it feels nice to be back.
We’re always here. In his room, at his house. Outside, with the dead grass and the gross bugs. I want to go somewhere else. Somewhere bigger, where we won’t have to be around anybody else.
“Let’s play pirates!” I smile.
Chapter Six
We’re outside, but we’re not. I made it better. I created an ocean and a big wooden ship with white sails using just my magic. I think I can make any place look like anything with a wave of my hand! I wish I knew that before.
But at least I know now, because seeing Isaac smile as a wave splashes on him makes me smile too.
There’s a silver sword sheathed in a belt Isaac wears. I gave him the sword and the belt. He’s steering the ship, because he’s the Captain. I’m supposed to look out through my golden telescope, but I look at him sometimes, watching how excitedly he’s steering. This is the happiest I’ve ever seen him!
He turns to me, “Arr! Any sign of golden treasure, First Mate?”
I point to where something sparkles with a million rainbows deep in the water. He’s really getting into this!
Isaac steers the ship towards where I pointed. I hold on tight, because he’s really fast!
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@vulpesvelox @Tikaya I continued this!
Here are the first parts!
“You can’t save everybody, Jack”. (Intro-Chapter Three)
Hi Creeper! Hope you are doing well <3
These sure are some very short chapters! I like the first one; it's super creepy. It works that it's short because it sets up the tension nicely. I wonder if the second two wouldn't be better combined into something a little longer so we can see the magic more? I love that idea a lot and it would be nice to get a little more detail here!
Should be a comma and then a lowercase t here. I see you make this mistake a lot and hopefully one day i'll see it fixed! It's very minor but grammar is my favourite thing to nitpick lol XD
I like the detail about his hair, but maybe some more detail about what makes the room dirty would round out the description here?
Okay this is so cool. I love that they have this power. But since they made it 'better' maybe a more indepth description would show off the power more? Is it really detailed, is it just an ocean and a ship? What kind of ship? I really want to know so I can picture the story better!
I love this description!
Looking forward to the next chapter!
thx!! ^v^
Good morning creeper!
Like it comes across so well that he feels trapped there!I have come to read this next part of the story :3
Ohh that Chapter 4 feels like a somewhat sinister prelude to worse things to come…
Okay and ch5 gives the context that this was some sorta dream LJ had.
Aww I really feel this:
While I feel like CH4 at least had a central idea that was executed very well, ch5 feels unfinished, like this shouldn’t be the end?
I kinda wish you would have described how using the magic felt to LJ. You just show him elated that he has it, wishing he had it before. But I would have like more descriptions of his emotions :3
The scene itself is really cute! Well done!
I just feel like you could end up on a stronger hook for the next chapters to come ^o^
Thx for reading/advice!!