Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for violence and mature content.
*This fanfic is underneath my folder titled “Creepypasta stuff”. Laughing Jack is a Creepypasta created by Snuffbomb, Aeliana is my OC. Gacha Club character designs are under my forum titled “My character designs<33[2]”. Enjoy!*
After Laughing Jack and Aeliana stepped through the portal to his decayed carnival, he could hear her gasp as she stared at the towering, rotten, skeletal remains of what once was full of color and innocent giggles. She was gripping his claw tightly, as if she were afraid that something were going to jump out on her at any second.
“Now, Aeliana, I don’t want you to be too scared of this carnival. This carnival is merely a reflection on how I feel. It only shows back my own sorrows to the world. It is nothing to be afraid of. Besides, there are lots of children here who want to make friends with you.” Laughing Jack said, smiling down at the little girl as though he had nothing to hide.
Her eyes went wide with curiosity as she asked:
“There are other children here?”
Right on time, the mutilated, bleeding ghosts of the children he had killed stepped out of the shadows. Some had missing limbs or missing eyes, some groaned or managed to only gurgle out a few words. All of them were struggling to walk towards Aeliana, who hid behind Laughing Jack’s leg as though she wanted to protect herself.
“It’s okay, Aeliana. I know that they look scary, but I promise you, they’re very nice! These children are orphans who don’t even remember their names! They were so badly lost and badly injured when I found them, so I took them to my carnival to make them feel better! They’re so much happier here and they just can’t wait to be your friend!” Laughing Jack beamed.
Aeliana still clung to him, not quite trusting his words yet. That was alright, because he wasn’t lying. The children really were friendly. In fact, they were so friendly that as they were watching Laughing Jack lead Aeliana to a circus tent, their faces contorted in expressions of fear and terror, their mouths trying and failing to form words of warning.
But he wouldn’t let them ruin the fun! Aeliana and the other children had to watch his circus show!
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Jason talks to LJ about the possibility of…A CHILD?!
Laughing Jack meets Aeliana!
Jason hears about the child!
Laughing Jack and Aeliana talk about friendship
Don’t eat too much candy canes
Watching them play
Raisa tries to play with the living children
Raisa Accardi, such a sweet little thing
Oh poor, poor Aeliana… She doesn’t see just how twisted all this is.
I especially like the description of how the murdered children show up. Shivers!
And LJ sounds almost like he ISN’T the reason for their sorry state!
I really like the focus in this story. It didn’t feel like you tried to put too much in it and just delivered on the premise of Aeliana going to the circus of horrors!
Hello Again, My Friend!
OOO, the exploration of the carnival did NOT disappoint! I love how Jack comes off almost as an example of "the road to hell is paved with good intentions," regarding the children he keeps in this carnival, and poor Aeliana is caught between trusting her clown-friend and not letting him down, and the sheer terror of this place!
Again, no recommendations for change!
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LOVE this explanation of his carnival, because in a way, yeah! Makes sense!
Ooo, love the creepiness of this part, and the sheer brutality.
This is kinda what I meant by that "road to hell" adage, because Laughing Jack does make it a point to target kids that are lonely, orphans, or otherwise struggling in some way. That said...is getting maimed and spending an eternity in a haunted carnival much better? NOPE.
I absolutely love this kind of language in your work, how you tell us what's actually happening, but the tone is so upbeat and deceptively welcoming that we're almost seeing it through Jack's twisted perspective. And besides, what a way to end this one!
Overall, that was awesome, definitely one of my favorites of these shorter works! Nicely done!
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Thank you so much!