*This fanfic is underneath my folder titled “Creepypasta stuff”. The main character is the ship child I made between Laughing Jack and Jeff the killer. Laughing Jack was created by Snuffbomb, Jeff the killer was created by GameFuelTV. Gacha Club character designs are under my forum titled “My character designs<33”. Enjoy and Happy Valoween!*
The bell is ringing! I can finally give Corbin my poem now! Yay!
I collect all of my stuff and put it in my backpack, all except for my poem, which I’ve folded up neatly. I’m going to get a bad grade for not reading Romeo and Juliet, but I literally do not care. It’s just a book about people who die, it’s nothing new to me. What’s more important is giving that poem to Corbin, stepping up and doing something.
Now, in most teen movies, the “shy girl” would probably get bullied by other girls by them saying that the “shy girl” does not “have a chance” with the guy or whatever, but lucky me, the guy I like isn’t popular and I only pretend to be shy so that people don’t ask too many damn questions!
When I’m done packing my stuff up, I join all of the other kids leaving and run towards Corbin, crying out:
“Wait! Corbin! I have something for you!”
Some kids stare at me because I guess it’s normal for people to shout. Some snicker when they see me. But Corbin stops. He raises an eyebrow, but he waits. That’s all I can ever ask for, really.
“Here is something I wrote for you. Don’t read it now, read it later.” I say, handing him the folded-up poem.
He looks a little suspicious, but he’s smiling. He accepted the poem. Yay! Progress! Once he starts liking me for who I am, my parents will then see how wrong they were for thinking differently! It will all go so perfectly, I can feel it!
“Nice seeing you, Janice.” Corbin says, putting the note in his jeans pocket.
“You too!” I say with a smile.
He can’t see me grinning from behind my hair, but he will one day. He’ll see my real face one day. He’ll meet my parents one day. He’ll accept me for me because he’s different too and different people stick together.
It’s going to be so great!
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This fanfic is the sequel to this one: Janice came up with a love poem for Valentine’s Day!
I like that sentiment:
Hmm I don't know how to feel about Janice. She feels a bit too forceful and like she's betting to much on one guy. The guy himself seems kind enough tho so hopefully it will all work out!
Also, the common problem of a bit too much repetition sneaks into this story too
Janice loves Halloween!!! (And she’s aggressive about it)
“We are ALMOST there!”
Belief in what is truly creepy
It appears that the parents have arrived
When you have Creepypastas for parents
Janice literally almost gets kidnapped!
That fine fall morning! (Part one)
That fine fall morning! (Part Two)
That fine fall morning! (Part three)
That fine fall morning (part four) (last part!)
Hey creeper, happy review day!
I'm pretty sure I've read a Corbin and Janice story before, so when I saw this in the Green Room I figured I'd snatch it right up!
Such a stellar way to begin this story. Most students are gonna find R&J boring for the corny romance or flowery language, but Janice here is bored by it because people die. It's such a commonplace occurrence in her life (because of her dads, right?) that it's gotten to the point where it's a total yawn.
Awkward phrasing here. I get that this might be a trait of the teenaged narrator, but I would write this as: "Now, in most teen movies, the other girls would probably bully the "shy girl" by telling her she "doesn't have a chance" with the guy or whatever"
Haha! Love her!
Shouldn't this say not normal?
Aw! I love this <3 Come to think of it, this is a theme that pops up a lot in your stories.
The story I had read about the two of them before was the part where Janice was about to take him to her home. So this seems like a part that happened earlier. In both that story and this one, there's that sense of foreboding. Janice's desires are beautiful and innocent, but she doesn't have control over her parents. I get the sense that things aren't gonna be all that "great" like she hopes, but I hope to be proven wrong! They're a very cute couple.
One difference that stands out to me between the two stories is Janice's level of naivety. I gathered from the other story that she's not as cautious as she should be introducing her crush to her murdering parents and all. Here, though, she doesn't read as a naive character at all. She's fully aware of societal norms at her high school and knows to pretend to be shy so people leave her alone. I guess she feels older and more mature in this story than the other one. Just an observation!
Happy Spooky Season!
Wolfi
Ooh interesting observations! You read about her taking him to see her parents, right? Well%u2026
Belief in what is truly creepy
It appears that the parents have arrived
Here are the final parts!
Glad you enjoyed this one!