Hello Again, My Friend!

It's me, Raven, and I'd like to review the next chapter in this great story using my Familiar method! Let's dive in, shall we? Heh heh heh...

What The Black Eyes See...

Ooo, checking back in with Laughing Jack and Jason, and what better to add to their gloriously creepy and romantic story than a slow dance? Love it already! Let's get into the details though.

Where The Dagger Points...

I didn't really have any recommendations to make! Nice writing job ~

Why The Grin Widened...

First of all, loved how you made killing seem like this couple's day job, so fitting for the infamous demon clown and toymaker, as well as the sense of comfort that Jack displays in the toy shop;

Laughing Jack grinned as Jason seemed to relax, his crimson hair turning white, his golden-brown eyes brightening into green, and his hands grow into claws. There, in the toy shop, he could be himself.

It's something I don't remember him doing often in the first fanfictions so it's like Jack really does bring out his true inner-cryptid. Lovely ~

Their little game with Jack creeping around the walls and roof, jumpscaring Jason who acts like he hates it, was also adorable.

This leading into Jack's curiosity about a genuinely beautiful dance with Jason was such a great moment, two demonic cryptids waltzing in a lair of a wicked toyshop and static romance songs. Especially with your wonderfully-worded ending;

It was just the two of them and the ghosts to watch. Nothing else mattered in the world.

Beautiful ~

Our Mad Thoughts...

Overall, that was another awesome story for Laughing Jack and Jason! Nicely done!

Hello!! This was a really nice short story, with a really great name That made me read it. There’s only one part which gets a bit confusing,

Laughing Jack grinned as Jason seemed to relax, his crimson hair turning white, his golden-brown eyes brightening into green, and his hands grow into claws. There, in the toy shop, he could be himself.

Who is changing? Jack or Jason? This is explained later on here,

He wrapped one arm around Laughing Jack’s waist, and with his other arm, looped his claw around Laughing Jack’s.

Overall, this is a really good story and it’s very cute. My favourite part is definitely this,

There, in the toy shop, he could be himself.

Thats all! Have a great night/ day!!

Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm Kate and I'm here to leave a quick review!!

First Impression

Well this was quite a cute little tale. These two have consistently managed to be one of the healthiest couples I've actually run into even compared to several others that don't regularly partake in murder.

Anyway let's get right to: Kate's Line by Line Reactions;

Laughing Jack watched as Jason opened the door, no doubt back from his latest kills. Laughing Jack himself had killed earlier, but made sure to arrive just before Jason did.

On the radio, there rose mournful love songs through the static, somehow bringing light to the otherwise dismal toy shop. Laughing Jack grinned as Jason seemed to relax, his crimson hair turning white, his golden-brown eyes brightening into green, and his hands grow into claws. There, in the toy shop, he could be himself.

Well looks like the two of them are having a great time there since the last time that we saw them which was them getting together for that lovely little wedding that we witnessed.

“Jack? Jack, where are you?” Jason asked, looking around.

Laughing Jack crawled on the walls and onto the ceiling, making not the slightest sound.

“Jack?” Jason repeated.

Laughing Jack jumped on Jason, cackling as he did so.

“Jack! How many times have I told you not to creep around in corners?” Jason asked, but there was a twinkle in his eyes.

Well this is a very cute little moment, the two of them out here doing little surprise hugs and cute moments, that I absolutely adore because of how well it reflects their more murder like selves without going too far overboard on it to the point the cuteness is lost.

“But it would be oh so boring if I didn’t!” Laughing Jack said, wrapping his arms around Jason.

Jason snuggled close to him, and Laughing Jack felt a funny sense of happiness within him. He knew that Jason cared about him, but still, moments like those shocked him a bit.

“This music is quite nice. Thank you, Jack.” Jason said softly. His voice was slightly muffled from his face being on Laughing Jack’s chest.

Ahh well looks like the two of them still have their fair share of little doubts as it can be in moments like but each other's presence is more than enough to allay them and provide some reassurance that its all going to be okay after all.

“I thought this place could use some music.” Laughing Jack said. He stroked Jason’s head, making sure to remember every detail of the moment, so he would not forget it.

“Could you teach me how to dance? You know, slowly? Beautifully? I can dance, but only in silly, foolish ways.” Laughing Jack said.

He’d always wanted to dance with Jason, but there was never enough time. The life of nightmares certainly was a busy one, and every day that they had to themselves, they’d spend it well.

Well looks like this is going to be an adorable moment, asking to be taught to dance is not something you encounter too often in romance but it is always a genuinely very adorable moment and I have a feel this is going to be no different.

“Oh, you mean waltzing? I think that’s the dance you mean. It’s very easy, actually. Just do as I do.” Jason said.

He wrapped one arm around Laughing Jack’s waist, and with his other arm, looped his claw around Laughing Jack’s.

He danced slowly, carefully, and Laughing Jack followed his every step, doing as he did.

It was just the two of them and the ghosts to watch. Nothing else mattered in the world.

Ahhh a beautiful little end. Looks like its another one of those incredibly rare cute moments in one of these stories that surprisingly manage to hang on to its wholesome nature throughout.

Aaand that's it for this oneee!!!

Overall

Overall quite a fun little tale as always. Really feels like a cute romantic moment honestly, a cute jump scare, a few doubts assuaged by touch and an adorable request for them to have some time dancing together. What more could you ask for from a little short?

As always remember to: Take what you think was helpful and forget the rest!

Stay Safe and Have a Nice Day!
Kate