Published October 8, 2026 ·
*This fanfic poem/song is under my folder “Creepypasta stuff”. Gacha Club character designs are under this forum: https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic/117842-my-character-designs-lt-33-3?start=270. Enjoy!*
So they say that the holiday is here
That the spooks have come, as they do every year
So they say that Laughing Jack has come back
The right ol’ clown, with his shaggy black hair and lack of a frown
So they say to be careful
That on All Hallows Eve’, he’s especially ca-ray-zee
But why not play?
Why not stay?
After all, it’s All Hallowed Eve!
What’s wrong with a clown that’s a little ca-ray-zee?
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Hey creeper!
This is such a fun song/poem about LJ. It really encapsulates the clown side in a fun, bouncy way but keeps creepiness underneath!
Great opening; I love the rhyming here.
I love the rhyming of frown, but i think if you had it so the first line ended with clown, so you can rhyme it with frown at the end of the second line. I think keeping up the rhyming scheme would make it even more playful and sing-song, which works well with the dark nature of LJ!
should be Hallows' Eve, with the apostrophe after Hallows
I love the way you write 'ca-ray-zee' it really fits his character
this was my favourite bit! I think you could do some more quick, short lines between the longer ones!
i think you mean Hallows' instead of hallowed! But i love the ending here.
Such a cool way to write about LJ!