Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for violence.
*This fanfic song/poem is underneath my folder titled “Creepypasta stuff”. Gacha Club character designs are under this forum: https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?f=27&t=116005&start=1275. This is about my OC, Alyssa, asking a Creepypasta character, Laughing Jack, for her friend back. You may google “Laughing Jack” if you wish to learn more about him. Anyway, I hope you enjoy!*
I know I’m just a fangirl
And I mean nothing to you
But please, listen to my story
My love for you is true
You are the reason I wake up
You are the reason I live on
I miss my friend, dear Kevin
Tell me, where has he gone?
Is he a proxy?
Living his life to the fullest?
Please, oh please be kind to him
Please let me see him
It would mean the world
For after he was taken
I only had you
Your stories, your laughter
Your candy, your poison
It all saved me
Your claws penetrate my skin
Your teeth break into my brain
Your sweets rot my teeth
But it’s love all the same
No one else cares about me like you do
No one understands like you do
They don’t believe in you
They don’t see what I see
You’re the only one now
So give me the chance to shine
I want to see the light
I want you to teach me what’s right
I’ll do whatever you want
I’ll be an obedient fangirl
Because a “fangirl” is all I feel
A “fangirl” is all that I am
I only have one simple request
Bring me back Kevin
And protect me from them
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Okay I am already intrigued by the the A/N here. She’s a fangirl and she’s asking her “idol” to give back her friend, so he took her friend and she didn’t like that huh…
I like the rhyming scheme and how every end of a stanza is so poignant. Still it feels a little as if “it would mean the world” is incomplete tho?
Hmmm I don’t think she’s actually been harmed by LJ tho, more like she’s fantasizing abt it and thinking that it would mean nothing to her?
She believes so deeply that LJ is the one who took her friend Kevin… it makes me wonder how she came to the belief---but then again I also think that she’s in pretty deep and might attribute all kinds of happenings to LJ?
Interesting poem for sure, these are just some of the thoughts I had while reading it ;3
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