Two cursed young girls: Part One [Nina Alexandria Hopkins] [Chapter Twelve: An invite from a friend]

by creeperfeverdreams

Published April 25, 2026

12+ Violence

In Creepypasta stuff

*This fanfic is underneath my folder titled “Creepypasta stuff”, Gacha Club character designs are under this forum: https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?f=27&t=116005&start=1395. This is a fanfic of Nina the Killer’s origin story. Nina the Killer is a Creepypasta character, you can google her if you want. Alyssa is my OC. Enjoy!*

It was the next day at school. Nina was sitting on her own in the lunchroom, eating a pizza slice from the cafeteria. She was wearing her purple hoodie, of course. When would she not wear it?

“So are you still mad at me or are we good?”

Nina snapped her head towards Alyssa, who was wearing a lavender lace dress covered in mud stains. Her black hair was a curly mess around her pale face and Alyssa’s smile looked tight enough to break.

“We’re good. You can sit with me if you want.”

Nina decided that there was no reason to be mad at Alyssa after Jeff pointed some important things out to her the other night. Besides, it’d be nice to sit with someone in the lunchroom.

Alyssa sat next to her, plopping a pink orange lunchbox that looked like it was beginning to brown, and said:

“That’s great, because I want you to come over to the woods after school.”

She leaned in closer to Nina’s ear and whispered:

“We’re summoning Creepypastas together.”

“Like actually?”

“Yes. I think you should come. You might get a chance to meet Jeff.”

Nina had already been visited by Jeff a few times, but maybe a summoning with Alyssa would make him see her as his proxy. After all, the Creepypastas were known for being gruesome.

“I’ll come.”

“Not like you had a choice anyway.” Alyssa winked.

Yes, Nina knew that saying yes was the definite answer, but she still had to be careful. She still had to make sure that no blood would be found.

Hopefully Alyssa understood that.

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4revgreen
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4revgreen wrote a review Review · Aug 1

Hi creeperfeverdreams, thank you for sharing your eggselent work - I'm here with an egg-inspired review for you today!

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Hello, me again! And we're back with Alyssa and Nina. I'm really enjoying this story so far. You build a lot of unease in this piece without telling too much, which is really good. Setting it in a school lunchroom is a good contrast to the dark undertones of their dialogue, as it shows how crazy it really is for all this to be happening.

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The visual details here are very strong.

Nina snapped her head towards Alyssa, who was wearing a lavender lace dress covered in mud stains. Her black hair was a curly mess around her pale face and Alyssa’s smile looked tight enough to break.


This is a really lovely description and I can picture Alyssa well in this moment, though there hsould be a comma after 'face' and before 'and' :)

Nina had already been visited by Jeff a few times, but maybe a summoning with Alyssa would make him see her as his proxy. After all, the Creepypastas were known for being gruesome.


This is setting up for a future plot line very nicely, and I'm excited to see Jeff come into the story!

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One main thing is that there could be a wider variety in the dialogue tags that you use. Most lines end with a plain "said" or no tag at all, and so mixing in a few action beats like a shrug or a glance away, or fidgeting with the lunchbox, could help ground the characters physically in the scene, especially since Alyssa's body language is doing important emotional signalling, and it is getting a little lost between dialogue lines here.

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Tikaya
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Tikaya wrote a review Review · Jun 27

I figured it out! I read the title wrong! Chapter 12 here I come!

Alright if this is the direct continuation… Is the stuff that Jeff pointed out last night the dream about the burning houses? Otherwise what things is she talking abt? Or the conversation she had with him even further back? (Sometimes, English time phrasings still confuse me)


Hm is there a reason why you had the middle of the story in italics? I would understand it if the dialogue is in italics because oha that is something to pay attention to!

Hehee guess two ppl really do have found each other. I would have loved some clarification here if Nina really only dreamt about her friends burning or any … thoughts on her parts, any reflections, but that is all 😊

Hmm tho why does she need to make sure no blood is found? In the woods... so she will not be forbidden to go there or.... bc it would draw attention? (I feel like so few things draw attention here so maybe...?)

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So her friends really did burn, but Nina dreams about it and relives the moment frequently.

Thx for reading and advice!



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