*This fanfic is under my folder titled “Creepypasta stuff”. Gacha Club character designs are under this forum: https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?f=27&t=116005&start=1080. There are three Creepypasta characters in this story. 1. Sam Williams, who was created by CamyWilliams9 and is thirteen years old in this AU (and also not dead yet). 2. Sally Williams, created by La Mishi Mishi (who is eight years old and is a ghost). 3. Finally, Lazari Swann, who is twelve years old and alive (you’ll see what she is later). Lazari was created by Chibi Works. This is my AU of them and I hope you enjoy this!*
Sam waited until it was late at night to go look for other beings that might be in his house.
He was walking down the hall, holding a flashlight in the dark, looking for ghosts or demons, anything supernatural. Sally had appeared to him, telling him that he had to take pictures of anything paranormal and use those photos to get his parents to want to leave.
He wouldn’t have believed her if she wasn’t a bleeding ghost, so there he was, walking down a hallway that he knew, but somehow looked like it was going to eat him whole, that was changing shape, hiding monsters-
Monsters. There was another shadow on the wall. A smaller shadow. A shadow with long hair that had two strands of the hair curled up to be horns, wearing a long dress. A little girl. He knew a little girl, but why did she have that weird hairstyle?
“Sally?” Sam asked, startled by how meek his own voice sounded.
But when he turned towards where the shadow would have stood next to him, pointing the flashlight as he did so, nobody was there.
And suddenly, he remembered that ghosts wouldn’t have shadows.
“No, not Sally. I’m Lazari.”
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This sounds like it's straight out of a video game! Like it's a quest to wander through a haunted house alone to collect evidence of paranormal activity.
So Sally herself is a paranormal creature, but she wants to help Sam.
Hmm, so it's Sally again, but she looks different. This makes me think that Sally becomes possessed or somehow loses her autonomy at nighttime, which is another reason why she wants to help Sam.
Ahahaha terrifying! I find it kinda ironic that he's afraid because this isn't a ghost. Usually it's the other way around, but here it's somehow scarier that she is tangible and has a shadow.
An evil twin, perhaps? I wonder if that name is derived from Lazarus and has something to do with being undead.
I enjoyed this one! Keep up the good work, as always!
Wolfi
hmm...Lazari is the daughter of a demon character named Zalgo. She is from the Creepypasta fandom.
A lot of people say that Sally and Lazari are similar, mostly because they are both spooky little girls and their appearance matches up with one another. But alas, they are not related.
Lazari is 12 years old. Sam is 13, but the fandom has him act childish because in canon lore, Sally unalived him and he looks to her as a friend or smth. This does not happen in my AU. I personally don't think it makes sense that he would be friendly to her after that, so I'm changing it.
Sally is 8 years old. The creator has changed her age to be 12 so her story was "less tragic" but this, again, makes no sense to me because 12 years old is still tragic. So she's 8 in my AU.
Anyway, those were my thoughts on some things in the Creepypasta fandom. I'm glad you enjoyed!
Heya! Great work once again! firstly, a quick summary, Sam looks through his house, trying to find evidence to get his parents to leave the house with him. He finds a little girl with an odd hairstyle, and thinks that it's Sally, but instead, it's Lazari. firstly, I like all of the unique names in your works, the one in this being Lazari! one bit of constructive criticism is maybe not to put "and" at the beginning of a sentence, especially a paragraph. other than that, Great work! keep writing!
Thank you!! ^v^