*This fanfic is underneath my folder titled “Creepypasta stuff”. Gacha Club character designs are under this forum: https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?f=27&t=116005&start=1365. Raisa is the ship child of the Creepypasta characters Laughing Jack (clown) and Jason the Toymaker. She’s my OC, as is Aeliana. Raisa is eight years old, Aeliana is the same age. You can google Raisa’s parents if you wish. Enjoy!*
5/17/55
Hello,
I gave Aeliana ice cream from my clown Dad’s carnival, just like I promised I would, but she didn’t even eat it! She just threw it on the ground!
I told her it was mean and she just said that she didn’t want it. How could anybody say no to ice cream? I don’t understand.
But I also don’t understand why everyone at school doesn’t want to be my friend. I try to talk to some of the other girls in class but they always ignore me. Or they call me weird. I don’t think I’m weird. I know that I’m not.
I saw a commercial on the TV today. It was for a place called Disney World. It was like my clown Dad’s amusement park except everybody looked normal and they weren’t covered in blood and all the rides work and the food doesn’t have spiders in them. It looks fun! I want to meet the Princesses and go to the castle. Maybe I can bring Aeliana with me! I’m still mad at her for not eating the ice cream but I still think she’s nice. I still like to play with her. She doesn’t disappear like the other kids in the carnival.
I just have to get my parents to take me to Disney World. I think it would be very fun because I can go on rides that won’t break. And I won’t have to see the mean kids in my school and in the carnival.
I think they’ll say yes. I don’t think they’ll say no.
It would be wrong of them to say no.
Goodbye,
Raisa Accardi.
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@Ravena @thehoplessromantic @kittycursed you might want to check this out!
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Ok, might as well go further with the Raisa entries~
And the conclusion to the ice cream saga! Aww looks like Raisa misinterpreted Aeliana's expression then (she did think Ael wanted ice cream after all)
Awww poor kid, having her first rejection. Hmmm Devil's Advocate, maybe it's the way she handed the ice cream over? Or maybe Ael is just a bully and Raisa is too innocent to understand? Need more research *reads on*
Hach, I do love how you potray the children: "except everybody looked normal and they weren’t covered in blood" Yes yes XD
" She doesn’t disappear like the other kids in the carnival." ohhh *winces* I feel like Raisa's Talk with her parents when she hits puberty will feel very different to the norm....
Also that trip to disney world would be... I bet unforgettable XD
Oh and that is a very interesting line to the end: "It would be wrong of them to say no." I wonder if this is Raisa's creepypasta core coming through?
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hmm%u2026perhaps. She has this idea that her parents should give her whatever she wants and that it%u2019s the right thing to do.
Thx for reading. :>