*This fanfic is underneath my folder titled “Creepypasta stuff”. This is based off a canon story on the Creepypasta character “Laughing Jack” which you can find online and is literally just titled his name. The original story is in the POV of the mother. This fanfic is in the POV of the boy. You can find character designs here: https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?f=27&t=116005&start=1365. Enjoy!*
James threw his solider and his tiny machine gun across the yard, not really interested in them. Mommy made him go outside, to “make new friends.” But he was the only person out!
At first, he liked being alone and playing with his toys, but it had gotten so boring very very quickly. So, he just threw his toys around.
James got up and brushed the dirt off his jeans. He walked up to the toy-
THUNK!
Something made him trip! But what? He hadn’t seen any rocks before.
James crawled over to see what it was. Sure, his knee hurt, but he could worry about that later.
It wasn’t a rock! It was a wooden Jack-in-the-box with smiling and laughing clowns on them!
James held the box. He hadn’t seen it before. Mommy didn’t get him a present. It wasn’t his birthday yet and it was far too warm for Christmas.
So what was it doing in his hands?
There was a sticker on the bottom, which read:
“To James, from LJ.”
LJ?! Who was that?! He didn’t know anyone named LJ!
James wound up the box, which played “Pop goes the weasel!”. It sounded kind of creepy and old, but still nice.
Nothing happened. The box just sat in his lap, the lid firmly sealed shut.
James sighed and put the box down. Maybe it was broken. He had to go inside soon. Mommy was probably getting super worried.
James turned around-
“Where are you off to, little lad?”
Startled, James whipped his head around.
James’ eyes widened at what he saw.
Standing in front of him was a tall man with long, messy black hair. He had gray eyes and super white skin, like his least favorite crayon. James had never seen anyone so white before! He wore black makeup. Makeup! A man in makeup! His nose was a cone, an ice cream cone, with black and white stripes. His shirt and socks were the same, too. He had suspenders and really fluffy shoulders that was more fluffy than Fido’s fur! His pants were black old people pants.
And he had claws…sharp claws…and his arms were so long…
“Uh…I…who are you?”
The man laughed, showing off a bunch of scary-looking teeth. His tongue was like his clothes.
“I’m Laughing Jack, the clown who never stops laughing! And you must be James!”
“Y-Yes. How did you know?”
Laughing Jack knelt down to his level, smiling widely at him.
James wished that he stopped smiling.
“I know every child’s name. I know what every kid wants. I know that you’re lonely. It wasn’t always like that, was it?”
“No…”
Before the thing happened, he and his Daddy used to go to the park together. They would race each other, go to the playground, eat lots and lots of ice cream and fries…so much fun stuff!
“I don’t like it when children are alone. They must have a friend, especially a young lad like yourself. So I’ll be your friend. Forever.”
“What if I don’t want you to be my friend?” James asked, jerking his shoulder away from him. Laughing Jack looked too scary and his claws were too sharp. He thought that they would get rid of his skin for a second.
For the first time since he met him, Laughing Jack frowned.
“I know I may seem a bit…spooky, but I won’t hurt you. I promise, I will never hurt you.” Laughing Jack said.
Well, his parents always said to “Never judge a book by its cover”, so maybe James should give him a chance.
“Okay. We’ll be friends.”
“Great!” Laughing Jack exclaimed, his smile returning.
“Now, what should we do first? Eat candy or play Hide and Seek?” Laughing Jack asked.
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It’s a shame, isn’t it? :(
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It sounds like this is a standalone fic, not related to any of your other LJ stories of either universe?
I like how you set up the situation in the first few paragraphs. I immediately understand the viewpoint character and why he’s where he is :3
Ohhh I like how there is nothing happening at first with the box. I am still a bit unfamiliar with the LJ lore itself (v familiar with the character tho XD) so this makes it seem as if using the box at all summons him to the field?
That is such a good sentence here: “James wished that he stopped smiling.”
I do like the thought of “don’t judge a book by its cover” here. And from this short snippet LJ doesn’t appear to be all that creepy aside from looks. But given what I know of him and that the view point char is a small child… oh jee….
Yes, the box does summon him. And it is a standalone from other fics you have read.
Thx for reading!
Hiyaaa creeper
I'm back with a lil more determination and a charged phone =D
Again, I'll be using cherie's Watermelon Review Method to analyse this fan fiction.
I wanted to review the fan fiction related to this that u posted more recently but I thought I should read this before moving on to that.
Again I'm new to the entire fan fic thing and have not read the original story but nevertheless that is no excuse to leave this work in the past
Skin- Initial Observations
The entire fan fic doesn't have much to say abt, but it has its own charm. For example I liked Laughing Jack's character for its sweet innocence with an hidden truth.
Let's be fr- a new FREE bestie in this economy is pretty rare. I would love to see how the character progresses.
You don't do much to create tension but it's there in your words
Rind- Interpretations
Our protagonist, James, is bored as he keeps throwing his toys around. As he walks to retrieve one of his toys, he trips over a peculiar toy he hasn't seen before. He tries to cilome up with ideas on how it must have gotten there yet nothing persists. However there was label that said it was from 'LJ'. More muffled he continues to scrutinize the toy but he is suddenly met with a strange voice. *Drumroll* That was some way to introduce our possible antagonist the one and only, LJ or the Laughing Jack who can't seem to stop laughing. He claims that he knows all the kids and doesn't want any kid to be alone. But when faced by James question, he frowns ( I felt that through the screen) as if he didn't want James to think that. Feels like brainwash. James , anyways, decides to spend time with his brand new bestfriend LJ.
LJ, in my opinion, was prolly Jame's way to cope with the most likely loss of his father ( I'm still a lil confused abt that). It feels like the imaginary friend many of us have had. This thought is also supported by his attempt to go out, only to find nobody.
Anyways let's move on
Pulp- The Tastiest Part?
As mentioned before, it would be LJ's character.
The way he had been described appealed to me the most, because it represents his own weird and eccentric nature of non stop laughter. I don't think anything is wrong with a man wearing makeup but a face covered with stripes would definitely catch my attention
Seeds- Critiques
I, unfortunately, don't have anything to say
Keep writing creeper
Take care,
The unofficial yapper of YWS
Ah, James has never seen a man with makeup before, it%u2019s his own perception.
That%u2019s a good interpretation to have, with LJ kinda representing the hole James feels from losing his father. This is based off something that was already written by someone online named %u201CSnuffbomb%u201D. The story is called %u201CLaughing Jack%u201D and it%u2019s the same story as this, except in the perspective of the Mom. Idk if the original creator wanted to get deep with his creations besides gore, so I wanted to go deeper!
Thx for reading! <3