Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for violence.
*This fanfic is underneath my folder titled “Creepypasta stuff”. Gacha Club character designs are under this forum: https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?f=27&t=116005&start=1380. Alyssa is my OC, Laughing Jack is a Creepypasta character. You may google him if you like. Enjoy!*
Alyssa hitched up the skirt of her dress as she walked through the mud, the trees reaching high into the infinite sky.
He told her to go outside when the moon was high and as she was his proxy, she did as he said.
Alyssa used to wear modern clothes until he told her to wear her Grandma’s old dresses. She loved them, but was told that she could never wear them, for they were “ancient and filled with disease”.
She wasn’t sick from the dress, but from her love to him.
It was worth it, though. He was worth everything.
Alyssa stopped in the middle of the forest. Laughing Jack stood in front of her, a grin on his face.
She reached into her chest and pulled out her heart…
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Your story is next in my grand exploration of the Green Room so hello!
Hmmm you have a repetition of “high” in the first and second paragraph which is very noticeable, especially in such a short piece!
Oh that is a cool line:
And shows the depths of her obsession better than any direct words could ever do!
Uhhh I don’t think you mean that metaphorically, right?
I do wonder how that works? Is she already so deep enchanted by him that it doesn’t hurt, that there is magic/creepy pasta stuff involved to actually make this work?
Other than that: very short ☹
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Yeah, it is some dark magic involved.
Thx for reading!