*This is a short fanfic of my AU of the Creepypasta “Nina the killer” who was created by Alegotic-twevel. More is to come. This is under my folder titled “Creepypasta stuff”. If you would like the fanfics that are connected to this please let me know and I will tag you! Gacha Club character designs are under my forum titled “My character designs <33”. Enjoy!*
“I can’t believe she’s part of the dance club! I thought that she didn’t touch grass.”
“Oh no, she’s still weird. Look at her. She’s wearing the glittery cat ear headbands.”
“Didn’t she have those since third grade?”
“Yeah. She hasn’t changed at all.”
“Do you think she’s a furry?”
“I wouldn’t be surprised.”
Nina tried her best to ignore the “whispers” of her classmates as she took the stage with her friend, Sienna. She was part of the dance club, and it was the night of the recital.
But of course, everyone was spouting the same insults about Nina that they said since third grade. No, she wasn’t a furry, but she hated how everyone said it like it was a bad thing.
She liked wearing the cat ear headbands. She liked to dress up. She liked her beaded bracelets. Why did everyone have to criticize her for it?
Sienna squeezed her hand in an attempt to comfort her. Nina took a deep breath.
She was going to be fine.
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A bit relatable honestly lol...it's CATS here again, to review your story. You sure write a WHOLE LOT
Okay, let's see...
The murmurs of disgust at the start is so realistic, whispers about her looks. Dance club sounds interesting!
Sounds like she loves the cat ear headbands, I don't judge
Sienna sounds like a good person.
Overall, I think it is great and I am excited to hear more! Keep writing, and Happy Writing,
Love,
CATS
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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm Kate and I'm here to leave a quick review!!
First Impression
Well this was a horrifying little look at a different kind of terror with people who will make fun and bully being potentially more horrifying that even some of the horrible killers we see.
Anyway let's get right to: Kate's Line by Line Reactions;
Well that seems like quite a lot of not very nice things to be whispering about a fellow human being. Definitely something that would qualify as more than a little bit of torment so we're starting strong here.
Well looks like she's suffering through the classic bunch of kids that just does not know how to accept anyone even slightly different and poor Nina just can't do anything but watch.
Well it looks like amidst all of that horror and all the bad things that people had to say, poor Nina does at least have one friend and some comfort. That's a nice little detail to end on there.
Aaand that's it for this oneee!!!
Overall
Overall a lovely little short really showcasing the torment that poor Nina has to go through and how she feels about it all. At least we have somewhat comforting ending that she isn't completely alone in this.
As always remember to: Take what you think was helpful and forget the rest!
Kate
Your writing really stands out, and it’s clear you have a talent for poetry and novels. The way you create your characters is impressive. I especially liked how you captured the feelings of being the odd one out, showing the struggles of the main character as she deals with gossip and isolation.
The support of a true friend is beautifully portrayed in your work. It’s heartwarming to see how their friendship gives her the courage to step onto the stage. This shows how powerful friendship can be, providing strength and boldness in tough situations. It reminded me that good friends can help us face our fears and grow.
"A good friend is like a great book: it entertains, enlightens, and helps us grow in ways we never imagined."
Overall, your piece is wonderful! I appreciate your skillful writing and the relatable themes you explore. I’m excited to see more of your work in the future. Keep it up!