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Sally’s Halloween

by vampricone6783


Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for violence and mature content.

*Sally Dawn is a character from the Creepypasta fandom. There are two versions of her. The original, where she is eight years old and the new one, where she is twelve years old. This story has the eight year old version of Sally. The reason there are two versions is because the creator, La Mishi-Mishi, thought that what happened to her was too bad and inappropriate, and therefore made her older. I don’t really think that the age change was necessary because unfortunately bad things happen to anyone of any age, but the change had been made anyway. You can google her story at your own risk. There will be other characters in this story, like Laughing Jack, created by Snuffbomb (who is also a Creepypasta and an evil demon clown), Sally’s Uncle Johnny, who is the reason for her demise and a horrible person (She kills him at the end of her origin story, don’t worry. She gets her revenge) , and Charlie, Sally’s toy bear. I heard that after her death, Charlie gained the ability to talk, but I doubt it. I think that maybe that was from her imagination of how lonely she is. Now, what does she do?  Well, she’s a poltergeist and her famous catchphrase is “Come play with me”. She makes people play a game with her in which she chases them and sometimes she kills the player. (I think if the player is an adult. I don’t think she does it with kids. I think that she has a hatred for adults.) Laughing Jack plays no important part of her story, however, people in the Creepypasta fandom imagine her and him being friends. This story is different. They are NOT friends. I was originally going to post this on October, but I forgot. So here I am, posting this now! Gacha Club character designs are on my wall. Before I finish my paragraph, I just want to say that since this story is fanfiction, there are going to be headcannons. If you want cannon facts, trust google. Now without further ado, let’s begin!

This was the time of year in which Sally Dawn could truly be herself. The time where no one was afraid of her, because she was just “in costume”.

Sally was a small girl, with curly brown hair, the largest green eyes, and wore a faded, torn, pink dress. She was bleeding from her head to her legs. In one of her hands, she held a teddy bear named Charlie who had seen better days.

Sally was never feared by children, living or dead. They all loved to play with her.

And that was all she wanted! A playmate! Someone who wasn’t mean to her, like the older people!

Someone who wasn’t like her Uncle…

Sally shuddered. No need to think about him now. She killed him. He was in Hell, probably getting what he deserved.

Tonight was Halloween and she would focus on getting candy! Lots and lots of it!

……………………………………………………

“What a wonderful costume! Who are you supposed to be?”

Sally smiled at the old lady with the candy bucket and twirled her dress. She had to do a pretty twirl!

“A ghost.” She said.

“Great job! For that, you get an extra candy bar.”

The lady gave her a really big chocolate bar.

Sally’s eyes widened. She had never gotten anything like this.

“For me?”

The woman nodded.

“Thank you so much!”

“Of course.” 

Sally placed the candy in her bag and then waved goodbye at the lady, thanking her again for the tasty treat.

……………………………………………………

Sally skipped back to her house, where she would eat all of the delicious candy!

Her house was very lonely without her parents around. She wished that they would come back.

Maybe tonight they would return.

After she’d eat candy, she and Charlie would wait for them at the front door. They would be very patient and wouldn’t complain at all. Charlie always complained about waiting too long! He was a very impatient be-

“Hello? Anyone home?”

A girl in a vampire costume knocked on the front door of her home. A boy in a firefighter costume was with her too.

“We want candy!”

Another knock.

“What are you guys doing?” Sally asked, walking up to them.

“We’re getting candy.” The vampire girl said.

“There is no candy here.”

“How do you know that?”

“Because I live here.”

“Well then, go inside and get us can-“

“I have candy.”

The three children froze. Someone else was with them.

They turned around.

A very tall black and white clown with a pointy nose smiled at them, holding three lollipops in one of his big black claws.

“Would you like some?” He asked, smiling bigger.

Sally didn’t like him. He was smiling too much, just like her Uncle Johnny did. He had a mean look in his eyes, like he wanted to hurt them.

But the other kids didn’t notice anything. They reached out to take the lolli-

“No.” Sally said.

“No?” The vampire girl asked, angry.

“I said no.”

“Why? We want candy!”

Sally sighed. She didn’t like to scare people. It made her feel like she was a mean person, which she wasn’t.

But this clown was a very bad clown and those kids weren’t listening to her, so what else could she do?

Sally flew into the air, the fall leaves circling her, as she looked down at the kids.

The children ran away, fearful of how she rose up from the ground.

The clown smiled at her.

“Nice try. But I will find more, little one.”

Sally bared her teeth at him.

He only laughed.

“How adorable!”

Then, he hissed at her. Sally fell back to the ground, startled from his sharp teeth…he had so many of them…

And then he was gone.


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Read this yesterday and had a good time reading! I don't delve into creepy pastas all too often but this got me pretty interested in them, so who knows, I may do some digging :D
The visualization is short yet effective, which helps me personally since I enjoy imagining scenes in stories. The story doesn't dwell on unnecessary scenes, so the pacing is on point. Sally's interaction with the woman was very sweet, making Sally an endearing character in my eyes.
Overall, nice read! Good job and I can't wait to read more of your work :)




vampricone6783 says...


Thank you! I have more stories in my profile. If you%u2019re interested in reading my Creepypasta fanfics, you can look under my folder %u201CCreepypasta stuff%u201D.



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The text above is a Halloween-themed story about a young girl named Sally Dawn who is a ghost. Sally is a small child with curly brown hair and large green eyes who is dressed in a faded, torn pink dress and is bleeding from her head to her legs. She carries a teddy bear named Charlie with her as she goes trick-or-treating, hoping to find someone to play with who is not mean to her like the older people. At one point, Sally encounters a clown who offers her and two other children lollipops, but Sally senses that the clown is dangerous and scares the other children away. The clown then hisses at Sally, revealing sharp teeth, before disappearing.

Overall, the theme of the text seems to revolve around the idea of facing and overcoming one's fears, particularly in relation to Halloween and the supernatural. Sally, as a ghost, is not afraid of other supernatural beings and is able to recognize when someone or something is dangerous. This theme is also explored through the character of the clown, who initially appears friendly but ultimately reveals a sinister side. The text also touches upon themes of loneliness and the importance of friendship.




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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!

First Impression: Okayyy well this was another really fun story. Quite different from your normal flavor but also the same as well. I've said this too many time but I'm always impressed by unique these can be despite you writing so many.

Anyway let's get right to it,

This was the time of year in which Sally Dawn could truly be herself. The time where no one was afraid of her, because she was just “in costume”.

Sally was a small girl, with curly brown hair, the largest green eyes, and wore a faded, torn, pink dress. She was bleeding from her head to her legs. In one of her hands, she held a teddy bear named Charlie who had seen better days.

Sally was never feared by children, living or dead. They all loved to play with her.

And that was all she wanted! A playmate! Someone who wasn’t mean to her, like the older people!


Hmm well this is a fun start. I don't know if perhaps she's actually feeling these thoughts or if this is part of what she does but for the moment it feels like an oddly wholesome moment and you do empathize with poor Sarah.

Someone who wasn’t like her Uncle…

Sally shuddered. No need to think about him now. She killed him. He was in Hell, probably getting what he deserved.

Tonight was Halloween and she would focus on getting candy! Lots and lots of it!


Hmm well we can already signs of that horrid uncle and what he may have done to ensure Sally doesn't even want to think of it. Well let's see where this ends up heading towards and especially what exactly Sally ends up doing here.

“What a wonderful costume! Who are you supposed to be?”

Sally smiled at the old lady with the candy bucket and twirled her dress. She had to do a pretty twirl!

“A ghost.” She said.

“Great job! For that, you get an extra candy bar.”

The lady gave her a really big chocolate bar.


Aww well this is a rather rare moment, to have someone just be kind like this. I have a feeling its going to result in some interesting feelings for Sally especially if as you stated in the part above she does normally hate adults.

Sally’s eyes widened. She had never gotten anything like this.

“For me?”

The woman nodded.

“Thank you so much!”

“Of course.”

Sally placed the candy in her bag and then waved goodbye at the lady, thanking her again for the tasty treat.


Well that was a really wholesome little interaction. Little Sally getting the candy that she deserves and being pleasantly surprised by an adult for a change. I always enjoy whatever little bit of wholesomeness makes it into these stories since its so few are far between.

Sally skipped back to her house, where she would eat all of the delicious candy!

Her house was very lonely without her parents around. She wished that they would come back.

Maybe tonight they would return.

After she’d eat candy, she and Charlie would wait for them at the front door. They would be very patient and wouldn’t complain at all. Charlie always complained about waiting too long! He was a very impatient be-

“Hello? Anyone home?”


Hmm this is an interesting one. It looks like we've got ourselves a little scenario with Sally being all lonely in her house now. Once again we feel for her because she really seems like a innocent little girl who just wants to have some fun and some candy and not be alone.

A girl in a vampire costume knocked on the front door of her home. A boy in a firefighter costume was with her too.

“We want candy!”

Another knock.

“What are you guys doing?” Sally asked, walking up to them.

“We’re getting candy.” The vampire girl said.

“There is no candy here.”

“How do you know that?”

“Because I live here.”


Well this is not turning out too great. It looks like the children are going to end up causing some trouble here. I was imagining this would be a more wholesome interaction like the bit with the adult but it appears this is creating a little bit of conflict.

The three children froze. Someone else was with them.

They turned around.

A very tall black and white clown with a pointy nose smiled at them, holding three lollipops in one of his big black claws.

“Would you like some?” He asked, smiling bigger.

Sally didn’t like him. He was smiling too much, just like her Uncle Johnny did. He had a mean look in his eyes, like he wanted to hurt them.

But the other kids didn’t notice anything. They reached out to take the lolli-


Ooooh this is interesting. We've been interrupted by someone who clearly looks to be a person out to entice children into some very real and very dangerous situations and it looks like Sally might be able to hopefully protect them.

Sally sighed. She didn’t like to scare people. It made her feel like she was a mean person, which she wasn’t.

But this clown was a very bad clown and those kids weren’t listening to her, so what else could she do?

Sally flew into the air, the fall leaves circling her, as she looked down at the kids.

The children ran away, fearful of how she rose up from the ground.

The clown smiled at her.

“Nice try. But I will find more, little one.”

Sally bared her teeth at him.

He only laughed.

“How adorable!”

Then, he hissed at her. Sally fell back to the ground, startled from his sharp teeth…he had so many of them…

And then he was gone.


Well...that was quite the ending. Several twists all at once there with Sally trying to release her scary farm which turns out to not just be ineffective but this horrible clown teases here and just runs off to hunt other children. Truly a chilling ending and in a way I definitely didn't see coming.

Aaaaand that's it for this one.

Overall: Overall this is a really interesting story. Sally seems like a very interesting creepy pasta here and I think you only end up really being sympathetic of her here. I loved the cliffhanger there too, I wonder if perhaps you intend to write more about that clown because I feel like I must know at this point.

As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.

Stay Safe
Harry




vampricone6783 says...


This clown is Laughing Jack, another Creepypasta and yes, I will write more about him.



kaitlyn says...


Ohh I see. Excited to see what you write!




"Beneath this mask, there is more than flesh. Beneath this mask, there is an idea, Mr. Creedy, and ideas are bulletproof."
— V for Vendetta