Incandescence wrote:The end was overdone/melodramatic, yo. Or, something.
Agreed. Although, I suppose it was fitting because of the way you characterized them as a sort a beast. Great mental image. Other than the last line, I liked it a lot. My favorite part was "do you remember their eyes? they weren't white / but you still fired anyway. " Ooh.
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