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Very metormorphic...perhaps too metormorphic. Maybe that's why your poems are sometimes so hard to understand. If you added just regular phrases in here and there I think it would kind of even out and it would be a lot easier to understand. You know, basically just explaining the poem in the poem. It's kind of hard to do it and be poetic about it but I'm sure you can because you're the greatest.
Ditto Mesh.
I wish I could comment on poetry in a coherent manner.
Um... I don't get it. It sounds really cool though!
completely wonderful...timeless (in my mind...I suppose acid rain isn't timeless, but whatevs, this piece feels timeless). And it's really, truly beautiful and great. A
I really loved this. The only part that bugged me was the 'they's' in the first stanza, but that is just me. Good job
The last line of each stanza..beaufitul. I would say this goes from to depressing (very vivid image, too) to more of a hopeful and bittersweet stance, not lighter, but that's just me. The first two lines are just chilling.
Short but sweet..I like it a lot. I like the contrast between the first and last line as at first you are greeted with a powerful, almost depressing image, but as the poem progresses it becomes much lighter and more airy. Yup, like it lots!