I love the imagery you use. The only problem I see is the last three lines of the first stanza. It seems sort of awkward/confusing. I think it would make more sense if you put the question mark at the end of the third line...or something like that. Then again, maybe I'm just confused about what you're trying to say in that stanza (which is vrey possible).
Overall, I really like this. Keep up the good work!
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