wanderlust

by Firestarter

Published October 9, 2006

In Old awful stuff

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lexy
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lexy commented Comment · Oct 10, 2006

*clapping my hands enthusiastically.*
I love it....... LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!

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Firestarter
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Firestarter commented Comment · Oct 10, 2006

Thanks Brad -- I'm trying to get back into it. I'll come back to it and attempt what you said.

And thanks Slick -- maybe blend isn't the right word.

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Incandescence
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Incandescence wrote a review Review · Oct 10, 2006

Hi Jack,


I'm glad you're still writing poetry.

This, for me, redoubles into itself. The notion of being One is brought up either too much for this, or else this is not long enough to sustain it. Your call. I suggest an overhaul on the first instance of being One but maintaining the proper length.


Best of wishes,
Brad

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deleted
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deleted wrote a review Review · Oct 9, 2006

ummm.... um.

Attempt at romance?

kindaza. sounds. romantic like-ish, sorta- maybe.

I think "blend" is totally the wrong word to finish this off with.

Try one of the following:
me'nage (did I spell right, as in threesome)
harmony
symphony



The fear of death follows from the fear of life. A man who lives fully is prepared to die at any time.
— Mark Twain