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blissful concerto

by Firestarter



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Thu Jul 07, 2005 2:10 pm
Chevy says...



You have to start out by sending them to magazines..or, just write a book of poetry. Find poetry publishers..and well, voila. I know a kid who did that..seemed to work for him.




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Wed Jul 06, 2005 7:38 pm
Firestarter says...



It's funny because I have absolutely no idea a) why my poems would get published and b) how you get poems published anyway.




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Wed Jul 06, 2005 7:33 pm
Areida says...



I love your metaphors.

Do me a favour and get a collection of your poems published, okay?




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Wed Jul 06, 2005 7:05 pm
PsyLynx says...



oh god, musical (good musical) poetry, and lots of it....perfect. Don't change anything....

I say "oh god, musical poetry" because it can be sooooooooooooo cool....man. Thanks. A




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Fri Jul 01, 2005 2:33 pm
Chevy says...



The first two stanzas confused me until I read the rest. Meaning I had to read it twice before it could actually mean something. I guess that could be good...or bad.




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Fri Jul 01, 2005 10:53 am
Liz wrote a review...



Firestarter wrote:we don't turn round in your convertible
the cd player blasts inspiration to
homeless people lying on benches
but we don't look back into the sun

I think the second line should end with "inspiration" and the "to" moved down to the third line. Just a minor change that would make it sound a lot better.
I really like it though. Beautiful.




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Tue Jun 28, 2005 4:40 pm
Firestarter says...



Thanks. Corrected the typo you spotted.




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Mon Jun 27, 2005 4:34 pm
Muse wrote a review...



Hmm, I like it. I especially like...

harsh riffs and small microphones make
teenages cry out to the world
but all you did was play me perfectly
you never lost any rhythm with me


Except it should be "teenagers", but that's just a typing error.
Great work as usual!!





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