Oh my word. That was epic, smaur. That was unbelievable. I'm in agreement with pretty much everything. The beginning seems like me getting in the roll of things before I started hitting it around the start of the flashback -- which is why it kinda sucks at the start right now.
Don't worry about me trying to edit before finishing -- I'll save this wonderful crit for when I finish the first draft and then come back. I have to get the zombies and the Nazis and such to paper first.
Anyway, once more, that was amazing. I owe you lots of cookies and shiny things.
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