Wayward Poise

I figured you had a good reason -- again, it was a very enjoyable read.

The change in format is supposed to follow the ideas presented in the poem -- ie. attracted by something different. Sorry if this isn't clear.

Thanks for the helpful words, Skye

Sweet stuff! One note on the formatting: you could try changing the font color on the ellipses to white, that way they're not so glaringly apparent.

I love the rhyming in the first stanza -- in fact, it is sheer perfection.

I got a bit confused when reading the second stanza, though I cleared it up on the second or third read-through. It seems to just be a lack of punctuation -- a comma after "wet" should clarify things nicely, yeah? Looking through once again, the second stanza is also in a different format than the rest of the poem. I have to admit that it's throwing me off a little bit; is there any way to preserve the continuity? Whatever you do, you must keep L1 for that pretty little pun.

I enjoyed this poem immensely, Jack. They're definitely sentiments that any writer will share.

Nice work, and until next time,
Skye

Thanks for the comments!

I have a few comments, but sadly I know nothing about poetry.

I really like the pauses in the poem, it gives it a real good pace.

The first section is great cause' story and glory go great together.

The best part though is:

.....The pen is wet yet inspiration
.....Is as lost as his destination

This just sounds SO good.

Hopefully someone who knows about poetry can help more though