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This poem applies to me, and it is kinda like that, except for the webcam part, she doesn't have one. Neither do i.
It's been a long time since I've come here and your peom caught my heart straight away this makes me muchly happy
restores my faith in poetry!
I loved the start to this I straight away knew exactly what you meant
Wonderful imagry love it
It's so true the way you potray the cyber world - a feew words upon our screen can affect us so much!
As every one else has picked out and said the word 'meat' seems strange
Love the ending it is wonderful I don't know I can ust click with with this poem *ah I'm rambaling!*
It could maybe do with being a tad longer I don't know that could ruin it.
wu x
Yeah I really liked it too. Although I agree with Harley about the use of the word "meat". Huh? Is there a better word?
It was good. I don't have anything else to say, other people have pointed everything out.
I know the feeling of that. I really liked it, pretty much Harley said all I was going to say. tee hee and I didn't understand why you said meat either. Maybe I'm just tired..... :IS ASLEEP:
I don't have any criticism either...I really liked this.
That was a great line.
I thought that this was really, really good. Your descriptions (e.g., pixelated) and word choice (e.g., ostentatious) are well done and add significantly to the overall feel of the poem. The ending part is a good analogy that is quite easy to relate to, and the poem as a whole gives the vibe of a rock song.
Overall, well done. I got no criticism.
This was an awesome piece but, honestly, I thought it could do to be longer. It does come to a rather dramatic end and all, and I may just like it ten times better when I read it a second time, but I think more could probably be said. I haven't been in an online relationship for quite a while, but it's wonderful how you caught the feeling of it all. Great job.
Jack this is really good! I love the instant messenger vibe and you can really understand the person's feelings.
This is really great because most people on msn just write "kk" and "lol".
I loved this part; I thought it really put across his feelings in an interesting way.
I loved the use of the word "pixelated"
I did't like the use of the word "meat" but I can understand why you used it.