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Thanks Soy and Brad. Although I really don't like this poem. I should probably delete it.
I'm sorry. This poem did nothing for me. I'll comment seriously later, though. We moved three gondolas and a 8 or 9 filing cabinets today. So yeah...I'll come back tomorrow when I'm conscious...or at least not as unconscious.
When I first saw the title, I was ready to bust in here and start yelling about 'sin' and how it's overused and just a...ergh, there I go again. I have a very nice rant on the very concept of sin itself, but we're not going into that.
This poem...delightful! Definetly the best of yours I've seen yet! I could see the emotion trembling in this like a dew-drop on the tip of elderdown. The only part I don't like is in the last stanza
I don't think the repetition does anything for this, in fact, it seems to take away from the fire in this piece. I don't think you should just delete it and leave it, I think a line should be tere...just not that one. Other than that...mushy mushy goey gooey praises from the Soy!