This is really awesome, and the ending really threw me.
Overall, really awesome. It flows nicely, and I love the fact that there are no capitalizations. Maybe...I don't know, just a thought...what if the "m" in "me" in the last line was capitalized?
That could be interesting...
But that's my style, possibly not yours, so feel free to leave it. I would never dream of changing your poetry.
'you are me'....
at first i thought, what the heck, but then i seriously started to cry...OMG firestarter!
no real critique...might think of some once i go get a Kleenex™
(had to put the ™ lol)
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