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Tue Feb 15, 2005 12:18 am
Skye wrote a review...



This is really awesome, and the ending really threw me.

Overall, really awesome. It flows nicely, and I love the fact that there are no capitalizations. Maybe...I don't know, just a thought...what if the "m" in "me" in the last line was capitalized?
That could be interesting...

But that's my style, possibly not yours, so feel free to leave it. I would never dream of changing your poetry.




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Thu Feb 10, 2005 1:58 am
Sam says...



'you are me'....

at first i thought, what the heck, but then i seriously started to cry...OMG firestarter!

no real critique...might think of some once i go get a Kleenex™

(had to put the ™ lol)





Very well; I hear; I admit, but I have a voice too, and for good or evil mine is the speech that cannot be silenced.
— Joseph Conrad, Heart of Darkness