Oooh, Fall Out Boy! *claps hands*
'cutting through the darkness with raw passion
rip it up'
Redundant. Redundancy is okay with some poems...but not when you're talking about raw passion and junk. Don't work.
Also redundant is the use of the word 'thunderous' in stanza two...yeah, I get the point but it grows old after a while.
Okeydokey. I'm out.
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