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The only critique I have is the mispelling of taste in line 5 of stanza 1. Otherwise I'd say this is very well written with a good amount of detail.
I agree with everyone else to.Well done!
Hm. I must have been in a bad mood when I first read this coz for some reason I didnt like it - but on second reading I think its great.
I'm weird. But hey, who isnt?
Anyways, I have no real critique - its very good just the way it is - except for the last line. I think you should change it. It doesnt have a strong enough link to the rest of the poem and there just isnt enough dramatic impact. So yeah, a bit of tweaking needed there. Otherwise, though, kudos on another great piece.
Excellent... I too am going to have to agree with everyone else. Chilling really is the best word. Great job, Jack. Normally I post my favourite lines but I would simply have to post the whole poem again.
Same here, no matter what you said (about it, not about what it's about, if that makes sense at all).
Chilling.
At the risk of sounding highly redundant, I don't know how you do it sometimes. bravo.
Yeah, I think I'm going to have to go with everyone else on this one.
oooooohhh....superb as Lucas would say...I really liked this. Especially the imagery and the laughing dolphins.
*shiver* very nice job hon.
CL
I really really like this, Jack. Great imagery.
*shivers* bone chilling, Jack--maybe thats cuz I'm drugged up right now, but maybe not.
I liked this part a lot by the way: