dead man on the floor

by Firestarter

Published February 16, 2005

In Old awful stuff

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Firestarter
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Firestarter commented Comment · Feb 17, 2005

Yeh, I used Roget! lol, who doesn't?

Though I did know some of the long words...

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Soyala Amaya
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Soyala Amaya commented Comment · Feb 17, 2005

I thought so. I was just making sure, ya know? Still, very nice use of Roget (or whoever you used).

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AstrangedbeaR
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AstrangedbeaR commented Comment · Feb 17, 2005

ahh thesauras, a writers best friend. (grr, i cant spell today!)

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Firestarter
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Firestarter commented Comment · Feb 17, 2005

I used a thesaurus, obviously. I do not use those words regularly, but decided I needed some different words to use, so decided to use a good ol' thesaurus. Thanks for everybody's kind comments.

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Soyala Amaya
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Soyala Amaya wrote a review Review · Feb 17, 2005

*gives you the happyIveeatentomanyreessespiecessoImveryhyperandjustprobingthingsatthemoment dance* Delightful. As stated before, exsquisite use of and estensive vocabulary. Tell me, were these appelations already knwon to you, or was the use of a thesarus neccesary? Moreover, the imagery was astounding. Dead dude ont eh floor. Hee hee hee.

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Wulie
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Wulie wrote a review Review · Feb 17, 2005

wow... its pretty much all I can say I agree with the above ths has to be one of your best pieces and as they said to it's simple yet powerful you imagry worked so well and the complex words fitted in perfectly wiithout confusing the reader! =D>
wu x

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AstrangedbeaR
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AstrangedbeaR wrote a review Review · Feb 17, 2005

wow, this was excellent, you have a fabulous choice of words and your are very experiened with what you do. please keep up the good words. nice theme also i've never read a poem where a theme like that has been done before. i really enjoyed reading this, keep up the good work :)

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Skye
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Skye wrote a review Review · Feb 17, 2005

My, what a large vocabulary!

I like this. A lot. Like Chevy said, it's original and complexly simple (FYI, "complexly simple" is probably the best compliment I can give you).

I absolutely love< the first stanza. The imagery and wondering feeling is awesome.

Overall, awesomely awesome poem. 10 out of 10.

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Chevy
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Chevy commented Comment · Feb 16, 2005

well, jack, i think this is the best thing i've read by you..you really did a good job on this. it was so fresh--unlike a nything else ive ever read, i think. two thumbs up for original work...way ta go partner!:-)



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