consistently inconsistent

I agree with Chevy about the comma (or semicolon) in "You smell like the perfume Impulsion and Caprice should" I realize you probably kept Impulsion and Caprice close together for visual and auditory effect (I like that), but I too thought the perfume was so titled.

My nitpick: You wrote a whole stanza about being incapable of writing about this person. Obviously, you did it with out the computer keeling over. It feels like you stuck this in for it's imagery rather than meaning.

Overall, I liked it. I like that you addressed the unpredictable as the audience. I like your novel approach. I'd like to see it reworked with some editing.

I don't know... it seems like your trying to force in all these big sounding words when some smaller ones would do just fine. Especially thE word "recipient." I don't know... you're trying too hard. You want a jagged sharp effect, yet your word choice seems so clumsy that the poem seems to bumble along.

I don't know...

Agh!! Why the period!?

Once again, you take something so cliche and make it unique. I like it, again. lol

You smell like the perfume Impulsion and Caprice should
be your middle name, because you're so predictably

I think you should put a comma or some kind of indication at the end of "Impulsion" because it seems like you're saying "You smell like the perfume Impulsion and Caprice" as though "Impulsion and Caprice" were the name of the perfume (though, maybe just out of my ignorance I'm not familiar with 'Impulsion'). Needless to say, I had to read it several times to get it. And,

unpredictable.

Agh!! Why the period!?

The last stanza was really good, though and the only thing that messed it up a little was the stanza I mentioned previously. Overall, great work as always.