how many times (13+)

by Firestarter

Published April 14, 2005

In Old awful stuff

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Crysi
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Crysi commented Comment · Apr 17, 2005

I agree with Mesh. Exactly what she said.

Beautiful.

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Meshugenah
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Meshugenah commented Comment · Apr 16, 2005

It's both. The last stanza I can almost hear as a song ending.

This is beautifully written, i think.

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niteowl
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niteowl commented Comment · Apr 16, 2005

I have nothing to say. It's a beautiful poem. Uh...I guess it could use some punctuation but it works without it and yeah I think it's poetry as well.

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hekategirl
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hekategirl wrote a review Review · Apr 15, 2005

I'm not breaking a law or anything commenting on this am I? anyway I thought this was more of a poem, but I guess you could turn it into lyrics, just by re-doing the format. This is a really sad, and beutiful poem.

"how many times do i have to fall
before she realises i'm too heavy
to be caught
how many times do i have to die
before she knows harsh words
and serpent tongues just don't hurt anymore
how many times do i have to cry
before she fucking realises i hate her so"

I really like this stanza starts the poem off very well.

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Shadow Knight
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Shadow Knight commented Comment · Apr 14, 2005

I think this is poetry, but wow, another sad poem, *cough cough* I wonder why you wrote this? Anyway, it's great, he he, I like it.



When she transformed into a butterfly, the caterpillars spoke not of her beauty, but of her weirdness. They wanted her to change back into what she always had been. But she had wings.
— Dean Jackson