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Very creative
Ha ha.
I love the first verse. There is just the word "Dominationg" and it doesn't fit. It sounds forced. A very good tactic I use to make the lyrics flow and sound better is by reading it aloud.
Other than that, you did pretty great!
wow
oh my god, it's freakin KICK ASS
wow
I have a whole tune for this in my head, jack
you rock, hon, seriously, this is amazing, i love the whole indie feel to it- totally awesome
hewhehehehehehe 'geezer'
I reckon it should stay as under control, its more 'rockish'
The "guest" message is actually me, i just wasn't logged in and was being confused by the new layout. so yeah.
It's better than I could...which isn't exactly saying much...It's grrrreat!
It's great, jack
Wow...this was really good. A lot of times when reading lyrics, they can be very redundant, but these weren't at all. It was fun to read. I liked it. :Two thumbs up:
i thought it was very lyrical.
The yeh yeh yeh's don't really look as cool on paper as what they sound like in song. I really liked this one, no crit. 
All you need is some good music now to go with it!