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Pretty with false meanings. Nobody forgets who or what they fight for. You illustrated a point well, but it isn't too unique, more a banter of colors and images.
impervious to the intuitive eyes of those living in the underground,
below the kill zone of tabloid editorials, forever seeking a way
to overthrow the fading imperialistic governments.
*shudder* I still have chills from that.
with all the subtlety of clearing litter from the high street.
*stares* wow.
the ancient radio exuberates with political grandiloquence,
love the image, threw me with grandiloquence (such a good word, though).
First line (and stanza) is great, and again I love the imagery. I've been staring at the last stanza now... a scimitar clashing with the steel edge/of a bayonet and disintegrate into the catacombs and/footnotes of history books I really like that, and it goes with the
start of the stanza.
The last part of the last ling I like but I don't like it. It makes sense, but I don't like it in context.. possibly becuase of the "we'll"..
Also, the fourth stanza third line "the foreign invasion" I think would be better without the "the". Am I correct in thinking this is (partly) about London, or am I just making that connection in light of recentn events? Either way, "the" makes it seem too definite, if that makes sense.