Hi, Firestarter ^-^
First off, this was epic. MORE than epic, it was legend. Lol
And btw, you DO have style. Don't listen to people who have nothing better to do than come on here and put you down. Your brillant.
I LOVE poetry written like this. There’s so much mystery and work put into. The depth is breathtaking, really. It’s beautiful, and if you get any negative reviews, well, they’re out of line haha
One little part that I didn’t understand was the opening line, though:
those who forget the past have no future
What does that mean exactly? I find that the past can hold people back, and that the best way to get on with your life is to forgive yourself and others. forget and forgive, I mean.
I could argue more points of my confuzzled-ness, but maybe you have a personal meaning behind it?
My favour verses:
and hide in the corner of my room
where the bright lights of the city can't reach
i forever make comments about the cliche
anonymous red rose lying outside the front door
And that closing passage was lovely:
of someone knowing who i really am.
I can't stress this enough, it was awesome!
You’ve got serious style and promise. You’ll do well if you continue to write ^-^
(One of the best pieces I’ve read so far, I’ll check out more by you.)
#FFBF00 ">Charade-- <3
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