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a night of shining amore

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Areida
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Areida wrote a review · Sat Sep 10, 2005 12:38 am

Oh gracious... that was beautiful. I really liked the play on words in the title; it's clever.

My favourite line other than that was most definitely "Your skin is so soft it feels like innocence". That is such a wonderful description. I would never think of anything like that, but the description is so perfect... Ah man, perfect.

I really like this overall. It's so simple and sweet and romantic, yet holds a hint of something deeper. Nice work, as usual, Jack.

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Very romantic... overly romantic? Ah, well... it's how you feel. *shrug*



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