Young Writers Society

just a series of numbers on a scrap of paper
with a heart in the corner
oh.. nice.

Good imagery, definitely. The last stanza, last three lines.. oy does that speak true. Also, third stanza, last line.. "scars of no confidence" I got chills from that. As for the rest of that stanza, i like what you're doing with it, but veering of course seems..eh, overdone, I guess. not quite chiche, just overdone (if that made any sense at all). But the line following i love.

I loved this poem. It was very creative and I love the imagery...it was quite a bit of it but you didn't overdo it. I'm not sure if I grasped the full meaning of the poem, but there was enough there to get the point across. Great work.