Hey there retrodisco666. Interesting username choice by the way and I'm going to try and avoid making any jokes during this review. It's just lizzy dropping by real quick, so without a further ado, let the reviewing begin.
The Jekyll and Hyde comparison is a big part of your poem so I should probably discuss that first. Though I didn't like or dislike the poem, I did like some of the comparisons you made.
Does that line above make any sense whatsoever? What I was trying to say is that my position is neutral overall because there were some aspects I liked and others I did not.
Now getting to the actual point of my paragraph of nonsense. The Jekyll and Hyde comparison is fairly accurate considering the type of situation you're trying to describe. Being underage, I can only compare such situations to literary and movie details. You may think I don't get some of the points because I am young and that is also accurate. At one point in your poem though, I started to look too deeply into meanings, like is the mc here also Jekyll and Hyde when he's sober. That was probably just me thinking too hard about your poem but overall I do like the repeated use of this idea.
And here comes the part I'm just trying to get through so I can continue with my review. As per my own rules of reviewing, not sure why I even have them, I feel the need to do two or three lines on spelling and grammar. Haha. There's nothing to be found in this section of my review today, so please continue on to the next paragraph.
As the rain poured down the Welsh countryside,
Beating against student windows,
I emptied my third bottle of wine.
The heat in my throat burnt as I danced around my kitchen,
Or was it my bedroom,
Or the hallway,
-Also great job narrowing down the setting.
-So sorry for the amount of sarcasm in the above line, the joke was just so convenient for me and I haven't written jokes into reviews for awhile.
-I mean really in the mc's drunken state they could have danced around the entire apartment. Or if it was a college dorm, all of them would have been the same room. (Yep no more jokes.) I think a lot of people would find that sort of description, careless or sloppy. But (you knew there was a but coming) I didn't which I'm guessing I'll regret liking it later. Probably about two am when I'm pondering my existence now that Doctor Who is gone from Netflix. That time is usually reserved for yelling about reviews but I miss Classic Who.
I didn't actually have anymore comments than all the ones I've already used. Hopefully some of them will help in some way, other than just getting this piece out of the green room.
Anyways, have a nice day.
Happy RevMo.
Lizzy
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