What's the point.
Not to what I did, to anything.
What is the point.
beat
I have been thinking.
Is this real?
Or do I really exist.
I am not sure.
Still, what's the point
Beat
Beat
The stars, do they look back?
What's the point in this, or that.
Or anything.
I don't see the point.
In breathing
Beat
Beat
Beat
Just kill me.
I don't care.
The beating of my heart
what's the point? Really?
Help
Beat
Beat
Beat
Beat
I will be dead soon.
I would do it myself btu,
what's the point.
Beat
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I thought it was nice. Well, not really considering self-destruction and depression came up once or twice. But in the sense of how well the writing is, I'd say I liked it. You showed your points on living and death, and I think it came out good.
The use of the "beat" can be cleverly played with. I like the stars example. This seems more like a practice poem, so I am not going to review it. But you have a nice tool, the beats, that I would like to see played with again. Good luck.