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*screams*
gah, that tears me up!!! And the ending "I don't hate you."You so bend what is real and what isn't, reality and fiction. You did with Ch too, and I love it.
*squeals*
I'm not sure if this is all fake or what but I'm loving every second of it! Mostly because Jon and Kyle kissed and that well...Kyle isn't dead! Or...he could be? If Jon is under that medicine stuff that Dr.Haaser put him on then is it really real like he said. Because I'm freakin' excited that Kyle remembers all this stuff about him and Jon and that he still let Jon kiss him!
I found plenty of hints in the old Ch.s so I'm going to start rereading those and see if I can make some semi-accurate predictions for the next Pros.
Great job on this, I love how it makes you think and wonder the whole time!
~Rieda
I'm speechless.
At the beginning I was cheering for Kyle when he got up! I knew you couldn't kill him! It was all joy, joy, joy! And then no one tried to stop them, so I thought is was all, like, a hallucination or something and there was no Dr. Hasser or anything.
But then I find out it's all real and then it was from Kyle's point of view and his thoughts for Jon, and then Dr. Hasser comes in and takes Kyle, and I think Kyle just killed Ariel.
I think Ariel was under a disguise to help them, but Kyle killed her. That, or Ariel was brainwashed like they were brain washing Jon. But how did Kyle get in there with out any memory? And yet they didn't know he was there? Did Ariel have something to do with that too?
And Jon is going to save Kyle, right? Or maybe Ariel isn't dead and she was on Kyle and Jon's side and she'll save Kyle! And then Ariel and Kyle will save Jon!
I really enjoy seeing the story from Kyle's P.O.V. Before I was so attached to Jon that I counted anyone else as secondary. As the story went on, however, I began to like Kyle as well. So now I just want both of them to get out of there alive. And Ariel, if she still is alive.