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I love how the ending line went well with the previously mentioned comment but...how in the hell could he have sex with Ariel? It's like he can't control his own desires.
I love the sexual tensions between Ariel and Jon, but I also hate it. I don't want Jon to have sex with her! *sobs*
I have a feeling Ariel is up to something but...it's hard to tell. She just seemed very...needing? I don't know.
*gasp* He's out? He can't just all of the sudden say that Kyle's out and then be with that...that..ARIEL. Ew. Ariel is such a freakin tease Grrrr. This better be made up. They were just getting into the talking of Kyle thing and the next thing you know Jon and Ariel are at it. I hate her! What the hell is wrong with her, always wanting something new. Lol, I really think that Kyle, Jon, and Ariel need to become on big relationship, then they won't have to fight anymore and all have what they want. Jon wants Kyle and Ariel. Ariel wants Jon and Kyle. And Kyle wants Jon and Ariel....it's perfect. Lol
Great job, I loved this one!
~Rieda