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You don't know how gross all those words look together...
lying (I can't believe I caught that...)
you can't barely do anything, you either do or don't. But I think this annoys me more because its "finally, barely" and that sounds odd.
plural, isn't it? Wrists.
I think you can see what is wrong for yourself in that one.
is that supposed to be I swear to God?
That was fun to read ^_^
I can so see this as a movie! Of course nothing would be able to beat the book, the book (speaking for the near future
) is going to be MUCH better. Lol, I'll speak for the now.
He strained to hear a whisper--anything--over the sound of his bare feet thwacking against the linoleum floor
*Yay thwacking!
I'm really scared for Jon and of course I have many many many questions about this whole thing. I'm trying to keep hold of clues so that maybe I can make guesses Lol.
I REALLY can't wait to read the next, Great Job!
~Rieda
Okay, so I skipped a few chapters (twelve or thirteen, actually) but this was right there, on the YWS homepage, and I liked the first line, so I read the second, and then I decided I liked the description of this chapter much better than of previous chapters. In all, I ended up just as confused as Jon, but that's okay. (I believe there was a compliment thrown in there somewhere
)
-Amelia