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Awww , I knew Kyle would never kill Jon!
Hopefully he'll kill Ariel though? ...he better, either that or I will. And what about Sarah, because she's obviously not best-friends with Kyle OR Jon... Hmm, I hope she finds out that Jon is really good, because ultimately, she's bad. It seems like the only good people now are Kyle and Jon, as they should be. Great Pros.! I was freaking out becuse I had a feeling someone was going to get their ass kicked. But then again, I usually have that feeling. 
Great job!
~Rieda
I love how you have lovely romance and humor at the end! *hugs jon*
You did good, we know some more about CMP, we think we get it, blah blah, and we had to wonder about Ariel and Sarah? While they were walking around I was wondering, what exactly did Ariel do with Jon? Something really bad? Because he obviously wasn't running around screaming like a sissy boy. Then I had to wonder if they were going to attack Kyle, Sarah, that is. And the presence Kyle felt? That French boogey man! haha.
This was lovely