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*excitement*
I knew I couldn't trust Ariel. This whole time she showed up I had the suspicious she was still up to these kinds of tricks. And the last line? Very powerful. Finally makes sense of your custom title.
I want Ariel to die, because she's starting to piss me off, but I still want everything answered.... I'm glad Jon stepped up and finally made sense of things, because you knew she was lying.
This was great! I was about to pass out, I thought that Jon was really dead for a second Lol. I hope he kills Ariel. That stupid broad. How could she even THINK of killing Jon?! That's almost as bad as killing yourself. I'm glad he socked her, she REALLY deserved that. Jon's almost back, and he's so much on edge right now (not that he wasn't before, he was just a little more helplessly confused and now he's more in a solving and figuring out mood)
. What is Kyle going to do to him that breaks him so badly? *shudders* I'm going to try to keep that from my mind from now on. I liked how you took the quote from your avatar and put it in the story 
. Really can't wait to read more!
I'm wondering about Kyle though
~Rieda