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The steak similie seemed out of place. I know you could think of a better one. So kindly do so.
Wow... incredibly violent, psychotic, and twisted.
You have such a skill for writing, really. The whole entire time I am going through exactly what Jon is going through, but in my own separate way, as the reader and not as Jon. In short, you rock.
In this chapter, the monster seems strangely reminiscent of Pennywise the clown in IT, by Stephen King.
"Jon felt the skin of his cheek parting beneath the blade like a piece of steak on someone’s dinner plate"
I thought that was slightly overdone. Otherwise, brilliant as usual.
Cameron
OMG, I absolutley agree with Rieda. This was brilliant. I mean truely top notch writing.
I feel like I felt what the characters feel. I'm a little sad about it though. He should be with the real Kyle.
And so I continue my Pro reading marathon
This...was....the...best....Pro....EVER! You made a Kyle/Jon kiss last like forever. I totally love you. Even though tis not Kyle... it's not Kyle right? That would be upsetting Lol. Kyle would love him though so not too upsetting. *thinks*
Anyways, this was great! I loved every moment of it.
Can't wait for more!
~Rieda