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Prosthesis #19 /P

by Incandescence


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Mon Apr 30, 2007 8:29 pm
Emerson wrote a review...



Dr. Haaser's voice brimmed with a deep calm and patience.
Shouldn't this be either "With deep, calm patience" or ... I'm not even sure what else. The "a" kind of throws it off and so does the "and".

Love is just the highest form of alleviation of pain.


I love that... I want to quote that and stuff xD Because it seems so unbearably true. Wise words from Jon, or from Brad?

Dr. Haaser pressed a button his desk and looked over at Jon.
on his desk? Missing words.

"Haldol" the mysteries you give us!!!

You are entirely right, it got a whole lot better now. I love seeing Jon's terrible conflict with Kyle! That's exciting. I really want to know what is going on. I feel like they're just messing with Jon. They know he loves Kyle, it reminds me of how on LOST (another one of my comparisons) the "others" have extensive background files on the people from the crash. I have a feeling they knew a lot more about Jon then they are letting out.

And...where's kyle? Ariel? This is turning into my cup of tea. I just had to tough out the intro.




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Wed Apr 04, 2007 5:16 am
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I feel so bad for Jon. But I think it's obvious that he's needed a therapist for a LONG time. This actually seems to be helping him. The therapist is starting to tick ME off though because again, I often take the place of characters and it's easy for me to feel like others don't understand me...if that makes sense.

This is turning out very well! I don't even notice that I'm not reading Ch.! Loved it!

~Rieda





You know that place between sleep and awake, that place where you still remember dreaming? That’s where I’ll always love you. That’s where I’ll be waiting.
— J.M. Barrie, Peter Pan