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I feel like I'm reading LOST, only it gives me a headache... I'm starting to realize just how much I have to think about.
You certainly know how to twist and turn a plot Brad. I mean, at first I was confused because even I was wondering...hasn't this happened before? But when I recognized that was part of the story I was extremely relieved. That was great. I mean, where is Jon, what's happening to him? It makes me want to find out!
And the ending just shouts: "What is Jon planning on revealing to these people?"
He could get Kyle in a lot of trouble if he wanted to, hell, I don't know who's side Kyle is on. lol, I love the mystery, there are so many possibilities!
Great Job!
~Rieda